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Rose:
So I reviewed Protection, by alota_cookin and I made a vow to myself when I reviewed I'd be more honest if I saw problems in what is a good idea. So I gave constructive criticism which...I'm hoping is taken well  :)

So, I saw this and figured well this was an interesting premise, so I clicked. And the idea is good, it's the follow through throughout the story I found shaky. See the problem is, the media by saying Nick is in the WPP is a violation. It would get him found, and it is against the rules. Also, Nick would be unable to have so many identities. WPP is typically a one shot deal, maybe two if one is lucky/important enough. This had potential but I do recommend next time possibly researching before writing, so that way it comes off more realistically you know? Plus a major plot hole would be with Nick only dying his hair and using contacts, his face is too recognizable. The story needs the extra step of either a body suit or even plastic surgery itself. Also it's not good to change writing styles in the story like you did with the MTV scene. Which, also was interesting (had it gone with the idea of him being missing rather than in the WPP) but you portrayed them amazingly out of character and the media would censor what they had said. The idea is good, and original for BSB fanfic. I just wish the follow through had been more precise, it is a good attempt though, so keep writing. And I hope my tips could possibly help in the future.

alota_cookin:

--- Quote from: Rose on April 20, 2008, 01:41:23 AM ---So I reviewed Protection, by alota_cookin and I made a vow to myself when I reviewed I'd be more honest if I saw problems in what is a good idea. So I gave constructive criticism which...I'm hoping is taken well  :)

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no worries.  :D It's actually, about time someone told me everything that's wrong with it. lol. Julilly gave me a bit of input once but it was mainly on one point. So, I ain't mad at ya!  ;)

julilly:

--- Quote from: alota_cookin on April 20, 2008, 07:32:44 AM ---no worries.  :D It's actually, about time someone told me everything that's wrong with it. lol. Julilly gave me a bit of input once but it was mainly on one point. So, I ain't mad at ya!  ;)

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As frustrating as it is when someone says "well there's this..." and critiques your work it really is meant to be encouraging. If you just think "oh well, I'm not that good I guess" (I saw your reply to Rose :)) and move on then you can't get better, you've talked yourself down already. Concrit is meant for you to embrace the potential that is in your work because really you've got a really solid idea it just needs some tweaking. I think that you could become everything you want to be as a writer because you do have a good imagination and you have things like an understanding of the English language (which many people who speak English do not...) it just may take some practice.

I rarely give out concrit in the form of reviews unless I think someone really has something and know they are able to do better, so feel special that I'm being nice today... cuz tomorrow... look out lol

RokofAges75:
^ Good points, Julilly.

I'm always wary of giving constructive criticism because I don't want to hurt anyone's feelings.  However, if I read a story that really has a lot of potential to be a great story, but there's something about it that keeps it from being "great" to me (grammar issues, lack of believability, etc.), then sometimes I will say something constructive.. . because as a reader, there's something about the story that draws me in, but there's also something keeping me from enjoying it as much as I would if that thing was fixed.  If the story is just all-around bad, I don't even bother reviewing.  I try to follow the Thumper rule... "If you can't say something nice, don't say nothin' at all."  So if I take the time to leave constructive criticism, it means I have SOMETHING nice to say about the story.  So I think I'm on the same page as Julilly and Rose here. 

Sakabelle:
Personally I would take any constructive criticism as a compliment.  It means that someone took the time to read my story and they feel as though I have the potential to improve on some parts that are not so great.  One of my friends read "In Pieces" while he was at work a few days ago and when I asked him how it was he gave me pointers on how to make it better (more character descriptions.. that sort of thing) So yeah, I was happy he told me so I can possibly go fix it.  One day lol.

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