Mariah
Innocent Bystander
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Let go of today, tomorrow's another day...
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« Reply #30 on: November 19, 2007, 03:31:34 PM » |
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My StoriesJack: FYI, he was the love of my life. Will: You've said that about each Backstreet Boy at one time or another. -Will & Grace |
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« Reply #31 on: November 25, 2007, 11:47:37 PM » |
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Ok guys, now that this one has been finished long enough for me to step away, I'm looking for some serious feedback! (I'll be more specific) I want someone who is willing to pick my story to pieces!!! name of story: Searching For Mercylink: http://absolutechaos.net/viewstory.php?sid=8501rating: PG-13genre: AU/Drama/Angstfandom: BSBmain character (or main BSB etc...) Group plus Kristin, Leighanne and Bayleecompleted? YesCurrent chapter count: 19Summary: When tragedy strikes and old friends are forced back into each others' lives, will they be able to find strength in one another? Will they find forgiveness for past mistakes and be granted the mercy they so desperately need?Anything specific you are looking for as far as feedback? (Dialogue? Point of view, description?) I'm looking for anything from spelling and grammar to holes in the plot, to bad dialog to anything really cheesy... (I am the queen of cheese remember.) Your opinion overall. What you liked. What you didn't like. Does it work? Is it too much drama? Your thoughts/suggestions on the actual writing style... Anything that comes into your mind when you read it really. Like I said I'm hoping someone will want to pick me apart. Thanks in advance!
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If Ryan looked at me the wrong way, I lost it. If Ryan looked at me the right way, I lost it. And whenever he tried to kiss me, something usually blew up. Someone ought to teach him a little control.
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Queen of Fanfiction
Supreme Time Waster
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« Reply #32 on: February 06, 2008, 06:14:02 PM » |
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Just reminding everyone who said they wanted to review people, that this board is still here. *Looks at all those 'I am sad the awards are over' judges* lol
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Ah well, there's always next year!
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« Reply #33 on: February 07, 2008, 11:51:39 PM » |
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Let me catch back up on school. lol
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~*Dee*~ People think it would be fun to be a bird because you could fly. But they forget the negative side, which is the preening. From "And Now, Deep Thoughts" by Jack Handey |
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« Reply #34 on: February 17, 2008, 02:34:12 AM » |
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ooh, that reminds me, you can take Mercy off this list. I don't need the feedback for it... I decided I'm not gonna worry about it. *shrug*
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If Ryan looked at me the wrong way, I lost it. If Ryan looked at me the right way, I lost it. And whenever he tried to kiss me, something usually blew up. Someone ought to teach him a little control.
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« Reply #36 on: March 24, 2008, 12:25:07 AM » |
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name of story: How Did I Fall In Love With You? link: http://www.absolutechaos.net/viewstory.php?sid=8820rating: R genre: Romance/Drama fandom: BSB main character (or main BSB etc...) Nick completed? yes, with story 2 in the making Current chapter count: 19 how many more to go? none last updated on? 3/18/08 Summary: Nick calls on the only person he can think of when he gets his heart broken. After going on tour with him will she be able to see her true feelings and his before it's too late. Anything specific you are looking for as far as feedback? nope, everything is welcome |
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« Reply #37 on: June 04, 2008, 12:08:26 PM » |
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I wrote this several months ago and I just can't seem to find the drive to keep it moving. I don't know if this story just sucks all together or if the plot line is a little too chaotic. You tell me what you think. I need some serious criticism here. I'm open to all suggestions: Link: http://absolutechaos.net/viewstory.php?sid=8994&warning=5Summary: Isabelle is caught in a love triangle between Nick and Howie. Nick is her boyfriend, but Howie is her best friend. When her feelings for Nick begin to fade...her feelings for Howie begin to grow. She must make a choice...which one will it be? Rated: NC-17 Categories: Fanfiction > Backstreet Boys Characters: Howie, Nick Genres: Drama Warnings: Graphic Sexual Content |
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BSB-Chick-101♥
Captain of Commotion
Posts: 222
I've got it bad...and I've got it good!
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« Reply #38 on: September 09, 2008, 04:33:21 AM » |
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Name of story: More then we bargined for.
link: http://absolutechaos.net/viewstory.php?sid=9216
rating: PG-13
genre: Agnst, Drama, Humor, Romance, Suspense.
fandom: Backstreet Boys
main character (or main BSB etc...) : Nick, Leigh-Anna(other), A.J and Brian.
completed? No.
Current chapter count: 14
how many more to go?: Not sure yet. 
last updated on? Sunday, September 7th
Summary: A lot can happen in a year. Nick Carter and Leigh-Anna Roberts know first hand how much everything can change. When Nick and the backstreet boys embark on their new album Unbreakable, emotions take over the couple, and for all their friends. Will their love pull through. Or is it more than they bargained for? Authors Note: What am I doing wrong here!?! I really need HELP!! 
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Um, not really much to say. Hi?
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Mariah
Innocent Bystander
Posts: 90
Let go of today, tomorrow's another day...
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« Reply #39 on: September 09, 2008, 05:42:22 PM » |
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name of story: Crazy Thoughts link: http://www.absolutechaos.net/viewstory.php?sid=8652rating: NC-17 genre: Angst, Drama, Romance, Humor, Sexual Situations, Language fandom: Backstreet Boys main character: Nick completed? No Current chapter count: 15 how many more to go? 23 last updated on? 6/08/2008 Summary: Told through Nick's and Mariah's POV. Nick & Mariah meet under strange circumstances. Is it too late for them to put aside their issues and just live? Sometimes to really live you have to die first. This is their world, told through their crazy thoughts. Do you want to know a secret? I can't do anything right. I can't make my own desicions. I can't make any real friends. I can't deal with my home life. I can't wake up without my eyes filling with tears. I can't remember how to breathe. I can't strangle myself forever with lies. But I can love you and that's all I care about.i don't know if anyone saw this before but i would really like some feeback on it. can someone take a look at it please and tell me what they think? |
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My StoriesJack: FYI, he was the love of my life. Will: You've said that about each Backstreet Boy at one time or another. -Will & Grace |
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kevmylove
Major Disruption
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My two favorite guys!!
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« Reply #40 on: October 03, 2008, 04:49:59 AM » |
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I'm not sure if you guys are still doing this. I wrote this story years ago and finished it this year. I was proud of myself because I actually finished it, but I was skeptical about how I did in piecing it together.
name of story: Because of You
link:http://www.absolutechaos.net/viewstory.php?sid=8177
rating:R (I'm not to sure it should have been rated R)
genre:Angst, Romance, Suspense
Warnings: Death, Violence, Sexual Assault/Rape
fandom: Backstreet Boys
main character: Kevin
completed? Yes
Current chapter count: 19 (Completed)
Summary:What if the two people you cared the most about, shared the same dark reality, that only you have uncovered? Would you tell them? Or just let it be...
Anything specific you are looking for as far as feedback? Well like I said it was supposed to be romance and then all of a sudden I gave it a twist to suspense (According to me) but I don't think I did it right. I would like all kinds of criticism, but mainly on the genre. How could I have made it more suspenseful? What was it missing? Please.
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BSB-Chick-101♥
Captain of Commotion
Posts: 222
I've got it bad...and I've got it good!
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« Reply #41 on: December 14, 2008, 02:23:07 PM » |
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Name of story: More Than We Bargained For (rewrite)Link: http://absolutechaos.net/viewstory.php?sid=9322&warning=4Rating: RGenre: Angst, Drama, Humor, RomanceFandom: Backstreet BoysMain Character(s): Nick, Brian, Other Completed?: NopeCurrent chapter count: 18how many more to go?: I'm not quite sure. Last updated on?: December 10th 2008Summary: A lot can happen in a year.
Nick Carter and Leigh-Anna Roberts know first hand how quickly life can turn. When Nick and The Backstreet Boys embark on their latest album Unbreakable. Emotions, tears and sadness take over them both. Can their love withstand what life is about to throw their way?Anything Specific: I know I already wrote half of this before, but I made a stupid mistake, instead of deleting one measly chapter...I deleted the whole thing!! Anyway, I just want to know from some of the pros, what can I do too make this story even better! I really need some help here |
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Um, not really much to say. Hi?
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« Reply #42 on: March 22, 2009, 05:08:20 PM » |
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Name of story: No One Else Comes Close To You link: http://www.absolutechaos.net/viewstory.php?sid=9655Rating: GGenre: Romance, Drama , Suspense Fandom: Backstreet Boys Main character: Nick Carter Completed? : No Current chapter count: 5 Last updated on : 22 of March 2009 Summary: Me (Destiny) and Nicks are really close and good friends.
We have been since the first day we met.
We are perfect for eachother...bu t we're just friends.
Even though nobody believes us.
We keep telling everyone that we are NOT a couple..But that doesnt make them change their minds.
But things change when a new girl comes into the picture.
Is our friendship strong enough ?
Would he still be able to stay my best friend when he has a girlfriend ?
And most important are we just friends ?Anything specific you are looking for as far as feedback? : This is my first story , so what I'm actually looking for as feedback is : What im doing wrong , What I should do to get more readers. And also if I made any mistakes spelling wise . Because English isn't my first language. I tend to mess up a bit.
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Shoot for the moon,
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seni
Fluffy Bunny
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« Reply #43 on: June 23, 2009, 05:27:39 AM » |
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Okay, just startet a new Bri-fic some day ago. I have lots of ideas and I'm not sure if I'll put them all in...maybe just some of them. :(Ehrm...I'm from Germany, if someone is willing to be a beta, you are welcome!  name of story: Uninsured (so far, might change) link: rating: R genre: AU, Drama fandom: BSB main character (or main BSB etc...) Brian, others (Kevin will apear later) completed? no Current chapter count: 2 how many more to go? not sure last updated on? 23-June 2009 Summary: Brian's parents got divorced when he was only three years old. Now he has to deal with his single mom's low income, her bad choises in men and the fact that he has to grow up without a father or older brother. ~AU~ Anything specific you are looking for as far as feedback? (Dialogue? Point of view, description?) Everything is welcome! |
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Veni - Vedi - VISA
I came - saw - and did a little shopping!
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« Reply #44 on: June 28, 2010, 01:36:29 PM » |
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name of story:Shattered Hearts Reunited Souls
link: http://absolutechaos.net/viewstory.php?sid=10128
rating: PG-13
genre:Drama, Romance
fandom:Backstreet Boys
main character:Mostly Howie but the others are mentioned.
completed? Not yet
Current chapter count:including the prologue 5 chapters
how many more to go? thinking about 15 more to go maybe more.
last updated on: 5/28/2010
Summary:Elizabeth and Howie found their love through friendship. She was there from the begining and was very supportive of his work. One day Elizabeth Mysteriously dissappears with only an explaniation that she would "hold howie back". What happens when Howie finds her six years later? What more can his broken heart endure.
anything Specific: I guess if i could use more description, less descriptions, Dialogue and if i need to re-write a chapter or two.
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