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Engarde!!!! The Reading Duel challenge
carterkid:
Visions of Love by alota_cookin
I've read two chapters so far and so far,so good. :-*
One question you'd like the person reading it to answer: Do you like the flow of the story and how it's unfolding?
Good so far but I wouldn't have the girls go 'off track' so much. Can't say to much through cause I just started.
Carter-Orange:
Maybe I'm just stupid, but I'm getting a bit confused with this main character. She started off as Mona and now seems to be called either Lisa or Lizzie?
Onwards I go though! I do like the idea of AJ helping to transform her though and it's good to see that they are getting along.
kevmylove:
I started reading It Stays With You last night, but only reviewed on the chapters. Thought I would post something on the thread.
This is definitely not something I usually read, because it's creepy and about Brian. But I have to say that it's well written and the cliffhangers just keep you coming back. I also like the smooth transitions from his dreams to what I think is reality. Plus the bond between Nick and Brian is what I imagine it was back then!
Uh...ok I shall read some more later tonight.
Mellz Bellz:
I'm reading 00Carter and I decided to respond to each chapter with a story review, but to give my analysis on each episode arc here. So I just finished the first three chapters "Carter... Nick Carter."
So far this arc was basically an introduction to the characters and the agency as a whole. In it we have Nick creating a ridiculous mission for himself to solve. We later learn that is out of boredom as he's been suspended from any real missions for some reason that has not yet been explained.
I thought the character introductions were done well as Nick went around and interrogated each one I felt like I was able to remember who was who and what their role in the agency is. Sometimes when you have stories with 10+ characters it can get confusing, but so far I am good. I also feel like I have a good sense of Nick's character throughout his actions in these past few chapters. So far he strikes me as the kind of agent who may not be the most skillful, but somehow always comes out on top somehow, although I'm sure a lot of the times it is by accident.
As far as any real Con Crit goes the only minor nitpicky thing that I noticed was a continuity error between Chapters 2 and 3 about what Nick was wearing. In Chapter 2 when he is in the elevator with Diamond you mention he is wearing a tie, but in Chapter 3 he is wearing a "snug black shirt and casual jean attire." Not a huge deal I know but for some reason I notice those minor details.
I am intrigued to keep reading and find out about Nick's next mission as well as how his last one went wrong.
Purpura Lipstick:
Since I finished Tooth Fairy, I thought I would read some of the other stories on my list.
Stockholm Syndrome. (after 5 chapters)
I like how the beginning of the story jumps right into the action. No background at the beginning but scattered throughout the story.
The story is well-written but I expected nothing less from Julily.
I love the character development, even though they are the boys and you are trying to still stay true to who they are, since it's AU you are still providing ample explanation and examples of their personalities I have a feeling you would do that if you were writing a canon story also.
I'm excited to see what all is going to go wrong. Kidnappings never seem to go as planned and I can't wait to see what more can go wrong.
I do have to ask, what is a Publix?
I can't seem to stop reading the story though I shouldn't be on the internet so much since work doesn't "allow" it, but the story has me sucked in.
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