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Engarde!!!! The Reading Duel challenge
julilly:
--- Quote from: Purpura Lipstick on July 20, 2011, 12:41:26 PM ---
I do have to ask, what is a Publix?
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It's a grocery store. I like to be accurate as far as the stores in the regions where the story takes place lol I suppose that something I wrote nowadays I probably would have mentioned that but SS is a throwback! Glad you're enjoying it even if it's on work time lol
Edit: I forgot where I had even mentioned it so I went back and now I see it lol
RokofAges75:
--- Quote from: Mellz Bellz on July 20, 2011, 12:24:55 PM ---I'm reading 00Carter and I decided to respond to each chapter with a story review, but to give my analysis on each episode arc here. So I just finished the first three chapters "Carter... Nick Carter."
So far this arc was basically an introduction to the characters and the agency as a whole. In it we have Nick creating a ridiculous mission for himself to solve. We later learn that is out of boredom as he's been suspended from any real missions for some reason that has not yet been explained.
I thought the character introductions were done well as Nick went around and interrogated each one I felt like I was able to remember who was who and what their role in the agency is. Sometimes when you have stories with 10+ characters it can get confusing, but so far I am good. I also feel like I have a good sense of Nick's character throughout his actions in these past few chapters. So far he strikes me as the kind of agent who may not be the most skillful, but somehow always comes out on top somehow, although I'm sure a lot of the times it is by accident.
As far as any real Con Crit goes the only minor nitpicky thing that I noticed was a continuity error between Chapters 2 and 3 about what Nick was wearing. In Chapter 2 when he is in the elevator with Diamond you mention he is wearing a tie, but in Chapter 3 he is wearing a "snug black shirt and casual jean attire." Not a huge deal I know but for some reason I notice those minor details.
I am intrigued to keep reading and find out about Nick's next mission as well as how his last one went wrong.
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Thanks for the great feedback, Mel! Glad you are liking it so far and are able to keep the characters straight - that's impressive, considering there are so many of them!
This first episode isn't our favorite, 1) because it really is just an introductory episode, not much action, and 2) because the writing feels a lot choppier than our later episodes. We still had 11 writers on the first episode, and that's a lot of people to get on the same page LOL. We were still getting a feel for the characters and style of the story ourselves, not to mention each other as writers, in the first few episodes, so they are not nearly as strong as the later ones (Episode 4 and on), when we had gotten into our groove. Thanks for mentioning the continuity error with the clothes; I'm supposed to be the one who puts everything together and proofreads to catch stuff like that, and I have never noticed that! I'll have to fix that. :)
alota_cookin:
--- Quote from: carterkid on July 20, 2011, 11:27:59 AM ---Visions of Love by alota_cookin
Good so far but I wouldn't have the girls go 'off track' so much. Can't say to much through cause I just started.
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Just a heads up...they ALL do it in this story, not just the girls. They are very random characters. LOL
alota_cookin:
And I'm to like chapter 20 of It Stays With You.
I go from being sick to my stomach...to snickering...t o crying...to upset and angry...then back again. I can't really find much to critique about the story...I think it flows well and the characters have depth. I can't stand blood and guts kind of stuff (I even pass out, half the time, when I see real blood, LOL) but the story has me so hooked that I can't stop reading. Unfortunately I have to stop until I get back from my trip tho. Admittedly, I never EVER would have even thought about reading this, but I'm enjoying it...in a love/hate relationship kinda way. LMAO!
Carter-Orange:
I like the sound of that story Kris, I'm going to read it even though it's not on my list :)
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