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Engarde!!!! The Reading Duel challenge

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Purpura Lipstick:
we post the survey here too?

mare:
yes

Purpura Lipstick:
1) Name of the story you read and the author and what you feel the genre is. Your answer might be different then the authors.
Tooth Fairy – Carterkid
I feel that fantasy is a good fit for this story, a little bit of comedy.

2) Would you have ever read this story if it wasn't a challenge?
No, I probably would not have read this story if not for the challenge.

3) What was your favorite scene?
I like the scene where AJ gets told he has to serve his sentence as a tooth fairy.

4) Who was your favorite character and why?
I liked Alan the best.  He added a nice humor to the story.  The story was so short I didn't get a feel for any one character though.

5) Overall tell us one reason why you think someone else should/or shouldn't read this story.
I think if the author did a revision and fixed some of the structural errors, maybe expanded the story a bit, that this would be a cute read if you are just looking for a quick fic to read.

6) Did it convert you to the genre it is? Would you be willing to read another story just like it?
The genre does not determine whether I read a story or not.  I typically go off of the summary. 
7) Give one piece of concrit that might help the author for future reference. This can be positive too, concrit doesn't always mean negative.
I've said it a few times, grammar and structure.  I know these weren't long chapters, they could definitely use a little more to help with the storyline, flow and character development.

8) This should be the question the author asked in their survey. Everyone's will be different.
The flow... the chapters seemed choppy and quick which affected how the story flowed for me.  The structure of the chapters also gave me a little trouble and I found I had to go back and re-read parts a few times.

9) Would you recommend this story and author to another person? Why or why not
Like I said above.  I think if you are looking for a cute quick read, I would recommend this fic.

10) Out of 10 stars what would you give this story?
3 – I think Carterkid has a great idea, I know it is also a crossover fic for Tooth Fairy with The Rock, but I think she could definitely take what she has, fix the structure and expand on it more and she would have a more interesting story. 

summer03:
At last wohoo! Sorry for the long wait on my first review on my challenge story! But work was hectic today, anywho I did read the first two chapters of A little taste of sin and I must say that even though it does have romance I do feel it's a challenge. I rarely read Nick romance so it is hard for me. So I should start duh! okay so I think this story is very detailed each chapter that I've read so far is full of detail in what the main character is feeling. which makes me feel like I understand the choices she is making. Aside from
 that and a couple of spelling errors I have to say I am intrigued and will continue to read and post more as I go. Well I should get to it it's seems some of you are already done Yikes! I Still have a lot to go!

summer03:

--- Quote from: Carter-Orange on July 20, 2011, 07:25:23 AM ---I started reading My Mona Lisa this morning (quiet day in work :) )

OK, I've read two chapters so far and find that it tends to jump a bit.  I got confused who was who in some places and think the comma use didn't really help matters.  I also find it odd that a 23 year old who comes from money would look so bad and not attempt to look nice for her new job, especially if she's the public face of the company.  I would expect that more from a teenager than a 23 year old.

Anyway, I'll carry on reading and come back with more reviews as I read :)

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Hey steph,

I have noted this and will definetly fix this. I was excited to know you were going to read my story as you know I am a fan of some of your work. Ok well I hope you can understand better as you go and just a tid bit here in the USA you will see adults with braces... I know it sounds weird but true. I am ready for more! 

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