Fic Talk > I Challenge You....
Engarde!!!!! The reading challenge part two!
alota_cookin:
--- Quote from: carterkid on August 03, 2011, 12:53:13 PM ---
5) Overall tell us one reason why you think someone else should/or shouldn't read this story. Readers would love how funny it is but may have a hard time knowing who's who. I can't tell you who is saying what!I think there should be something to let you know who's talking.
7) Give one piece of concrit that might help the author for future reference. This can be positive too, concrit doesn't always mean negative.
I'm not good at giving concrit but I would say give more details to who's talking.
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After really looking at this, I think the confusion may come from my personal style of writing...I get annoyed with the constant "he said, she said" stuff after every piece of dialog...for whatever reason, I can't stand the redundancy of it. So generally I use the paragraph that accompanies the dialog, to show who is actually saying it. For example...
"Smooth move McLean!" Oh sure...now HE is ganging up against me too...perfect!
Because (AJ) McLean is being addressed in the statement...an d there are only two men in the story at this point, the "he" is supposed to point to Howie as the speaker. Usually the sentence following the statement should indicate who is speaking...it's just not as direct as "Howie said". I hope this helps clear up your confusion and I will work on trying to make it more clear, from now on.
Thank you for reading the story though...I'm really glad you liked it, despite the confusion you had over the dialog. I really DO hope you continue to read. :)
mare:
Thanks for reading the story Kristal. I know this one is a rough one to start with to get introduced into the world of suspense. I'm glad you enjoyed it and stuck with it, and okay maybe i'll fix the dialogue punctuation... one day. LOL
myconfession:
--- Quote from: Rose on August 02, 2011, 03:22:57 PM ---Totally butting in to say, I'd like to hope everyone here could separate personal feelings to be fair to a story. :) Cause that'd be pretty messed up if they couldn't LOL.
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LOL You never know! There's some crazies out there! Nah, I know nobody taking part in this would do that. I guess I'm just so used to getting feedback from people who are used to my writing and stuff.
myconfession:
--- Quote from: TheDistantHeart on August 02, 2011, 04:38:33 PM ---You dont have to worry, Karah. I dont dislike you and even if i did, i wouldnt let that influence my opinion on your story. ;) But i know some people would and thats too bad.
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LOL Well I'm glad you liked it <3 I can't wait to see what you think of the end lol
summer03:
Ok sorry for the lack of my appearance but, my computer officially hates me and died. I was out of town this weekend too so didnt read much. I am in reading mode now and I have to say A Little taste of sin is getting interesting by the chapter I am in chapter 11 now. I have to say the story is flowing well and very elaborate, my on little issue is the length of the chapters. But I am getting used to it now... Ok well going to read some more and be back in a few more chapters. Mel sorry for the delay!
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