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cabybakes:
Thoughts on Sinister Devotion

I have read through Chapter 20 of Sinister Devotion and here are a few thoughts...

I am really enjoying Jack as a character.  I feel like I really know him and we are really exploring his issues.  Even though his job is very inhuman and he began very machine like in some ways, I love the way Erika has really let us see him becoming human in his own words.  I feel like I know Jack really well and I think he is a very well rounded character.

Admittedly, I am not an action person and I think that is why I keep finding myself getting confused at the transition from Jack's thinking to the first person description of the action that is taking place combined with a lot of dialogue.  I think it is just a preference, I like detailed description and I wish there was a bit more of the scene rather than just being told this is what is happening. 

I'm really not sure how I feel about Crystal...I don't feel like I really know her well because I know things about her, but we haven't really gotten inside of her they way we have with Jack.  I hope that her character develops more as the story progresses because she plays just as much of a role as Jack.

Overall, good story - grammatically correct with only an occasional error.  Interesting story line...very unique and great male lead.

kevmylove:

Hey Darby I'm glad you are feeling better and have been able to read more SD. I'm happy to hear that you think Jack is a well rounded character and that you caught his changes in his personality. I was hoping the readers could feel his emotions. It's a big change for him. So, I'm glad you you are enjoying his character. Because that was a big worry of mine. I was so into writing the story, that sometimes I just went with the flow and didn't realize something until someone would mention it. +

As for the action sequence...I thought putting the action through his eyes was the only way to do it. I really wouldn't have been able to/or thought it was possible to write the action in any other POV. Could I have done that actually?

I think that's a big flaw of mine. I was so engrossed with Jack telling his story, that I don't think I got to in depth with Crystal's character. Oops! Thank you for your honest feedback as you commented on the concrit thread, I wish I could have recieved some concrit before I finished the stot. thanks again Darby. ;)


Mare I read the story. I found it sad that his dad had so much influence on what he became. He had so much pent up anger and an obsession with what was his (mine). Poor Nick for being the guy that pushed his buttons that night. I doubt he didn't cause he was rude. lol.

mare:
Thanks Erika! :)

mare:
this is Summer's survey for her story. YAY to you finishing this Summer! :)

1) Name of the story you read and the author and what you feel the genre is. Your answer might be different then the authors. A Little Taste Of Sin – Romance and Drama

2) Would you have ever read this story if it wasn't a challenge?  No just cause I saw how long the chapters were and I tend to stay away from long chapters.

3) What was your favorite scene?
I think I would have to say when Alyssa shows up at the condo for the first time and  its raining... I won't give to much details on the scene but very romantic.

4) Who was your favorite character and why?
Nick just because when I first started the story I had a very different opinion of him as being more of a jerk (maybe cause of the way Alyssa viewed him at first) but as I read on he really had changed and he became a very mature person.

5) Overall tell us one reason why you think someone else should/or shouldn't read this story. Now that I've read the story I think its a good read especially if you love details. It has drama, romance, even a little angst. If you like sappy romances this is a good read.

6) Did it convert you to the genre it is? Would you be willing to read another story just like it? Well I love Romance but did convert me to read Nick romances more often. Yes I would read more romance.

7) Give one piece of concrit that might help the author for future reference. This can be positive too, concrit doesn't always mean negative. Like I've mentioned to Mel before its a great story, but me the only issue was the long chapters and sometimes just the chapter didn't need all the explaining. Mel did an great job capturing the feeling though and I enjoyed it once I got into it.

8) This should be the question the author asked in their survey. Everyone's will be different. I think the drama is believable it did go with the genre of Drama and Romance. So no, I think it fit your story.

9) Would you recommend this story and author to another person? Why or why not
Yes if you like a Nick Romance I think you will enjoy this story.

10) Out of 10 stars what would you give this story?
8

11) Do you think after you are done reading what's there so far (and you only have to read however many chapters are there when the start of this challenge was given) Do you think you will continue to read the story through to the end to see what happens to the characters?

And for those of you reading completed stories, if there was a sequel, would you be curious enough to continue reading on? I'm a little curious and I might check it out.

mare:
Rose, Saka Steph, Mel, Imke and Darby, you are two days away from epically failing at this challenge.

you are making the boys very unhappy.

 :( :-[ :shrug: :'( >:(

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