Name of story: The Apartment
Year you wrote it: 2004
Summary: (You can use the one off of the site or write a new one) When the Carters decide to go on a family vacation, they drop Nick off to spend three weeks with Howie, Kevin and Brian who are all sharing a one bedroom apartment in Florida. At the beginning of their careers they are all trying to become accustomed to each other and the last thing Kevin wants to do is baby sit who he considers to be the most annoying child on the planet!
Main Character: Kevin, Nick, group
1) Did you feel your characters were strong?
Yup
2) Was your plot consistent?
Yup again lol
3) Did you have many filler chapters or sub plots?
No fillers or sub plots happening
4) What is something you are proud of concerning this story?
I liked the exploring of Nick and Kevin's relationship when they first started out. That's when this story takes place, in the very early days before they were famous or even signed and all of the guys are still trying to figure each other out, but it mainly focuses on Kevin and Nick's relationship and especially Kevin's thoughts.
5) Did you find any major problems or inconsistencie s ?
Just some editing issues! I could tell I was in a rush to post this without thoroughly checking it like I do now. This was my let me write about four or five stories at once and see how it goes, period lol Also again with the not breaking up the dialogue but I didn't do it as much in this one, maybe a few places.
6) Something interesting that you took away from this one?
I am pretty cheesy! I could tell how influenced by Swenglish I was for this one. It's funny because at the end I do thank her so there ya go! LOL
7) On a scale of one to ten, how would you rate this one?
I would give it about a 7 for the idea but about a 6 for the execution.
8) Did your opinion change from you wrote it originally?
I am pretty sure when I wrote it, I thought it was awesome! Now, not so much lol
9) Would you recommend this one to anyone?
Yikes, I'm not sure. On the one hand I think it's a great idea and there are parts in here that I am really proud of, but It also kind of embarrassed me a little more than I thought it would. So, I would say if you are in the mood to read something really cute, over the top cheesy and sweet this would be a fun one but otherwise, not my best stuff lol
Final thoughts and comments about it: (If you think everyone else should give it a chance or not etc...)
You could tell in this one, I was still getting to know these guys better myself. I wrote them so stereotypical that I actually laughed out loud a few times. I have Howie winking left and right in this one! I use lil man about every other sentence and I make Nick a bit over to top immature at times. Looking back I doubt he would have done some of the stuff I had him do but maybe? I guess that's what I'm on the fence about lol because I know several 12 and 13 year olds that do act the way I portrayed him but quite a few, not really. I did like the way I portrayed Brian. He was my comic relief in this one and I found myself enjoying him a lot! And my obvious hate of Jane was there big time!
I also thought it was pretty funny where towards the end Nick sprains his ankle (Swenglish influenced lol) and they talk about him going to the emergency room before it gets infected and they have to chop his leg off and they make a joke about not being able to have a one legged Nick in the group! lmao I found myself wondering if I was inspired to write that before Broken or if I took that as a nod TO Broken LOL If it was before Broken's time that's pretty funny! It was about February or so of 2004 when I wrote that chapter.
Anyway, I think I'm going to tackle To Protect and Serve next because it looks like I was writing that at the same time as this which is insane to me since they are so night and day!