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nicksgal:
--- Quote from: FrickingKaos on February 27, 2021, 06:09:57 PM ---This was especially hilarious because in real life Nick's posted about taking baths. I always went "Ha, I knew he liked baths" xD
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Hahaha, I love when little things like that end up being true too. I had a similar moment watching the documentary when they were hiking up the hill, since I always figured Kevin would force them to go on hikes and AJ would always be really underprepared in his skinny jeans.
--- Quote from: FrickingKaos on February 27, 2021, 06:09:57 PM ---All the Detective work was just a fun element of the story to write. AJ, Howie and Brian looking for clues and figuring out the mystery together.
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I'm picturing them in those little Sherlock Holmes hats with magnifying glasses! :D
nicksgal:
This is slightly off-topic, but I finally figured out why I spent the past two days writing ahead instead of focusing on the current chapter I should be writing: I was starting it in the wrong place, apparently. AJ's too quiet. He needs to say "I'm bored and have things I need to do and say" much louder so I can hear him over Nick constantly screaming in my head. And it doesn't help when Nick's only screaming "Awesome! Keep going!" because then everything seems fine. Maybe all the Boys are constantly screaming, but they all scream internally, while Nick screams extremely externally.
RokofAges75:
--- Quote from: nicksgal on February 27, 2021, 02:48:50 PM ---I'm going to need an example for your edited to add so that I can laugh too. Also I can see why you would get tired of typing the same body part or bodily fluid over and over again. ;)
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Presenting a list of Google's synonyms for body parts and fluids:
penis: phallus, (male) member, (male) organ, sex, erection, pee-pee, mickey, lunch box, intromittent organ, membrum virile, virile member, nerve, person, propagator, tarse, verge, pizzle, loom, needle, pillicock, pintle, runnion
breast: mammary gland, mamma, bosom(s), bust, chest, boobs, knockers, boobies, bazookas, melons, jubblies, bubbies, orbs, globes, bristols, charlies, baps, bazooms, casabas, chi-chis, norks, dugs, paps, embonpoint
butt: buttocks, bottom, cheeks, hindquarters, haunches, rear, rump, rear end, backside, seat, derrière, Sitzfleisch, nates, behind, sit-upon, stern, BTM, tochus, rusty dusty, bum, botty, prat, jacksie, bahookie, fanny, tush, tushie, tail, duff, buns, booty, caboose, heinie, patootie, keister, tuchis, bazoo, bippy, batty, rass, fundament, posterior, breech
vomit: sick, vomitus, ejecta, puke, spew, technicolor yawn, liquid laugh, pavement pizza, barf, upchuck, chunder, purge, parbreak
feces: excrement, bodily waste, waste matter, ordure, dung, manure, scat, excreta, stools, droppings, dirt, filth, muck, mess, poo, doo-doo, doings, turds, caca, cack, whoopsies, jobbies, poop, night soil, egesta, feculence
Those are the best ones I found. :D (And yes, my sense of humor is about as mature as my 9-year-old students.)
--- Quote from: nicksgal on February 27, 2021, 02:48:50 PM ---Oh, I know one that I do so much, it's abysmal. "So-and-so clenched their fist." I don't know why I wrote "so-and-so," it's usually Nick. "Nick clenched his fist." "Nick's clenched fist shook violently." "Nick growled and clenched his fist." [An aside... Yo, they're demons; I figure they can actually growl like dogs. And I hope that when I've written it, anyone reading has read it as "*growling sound* I'll murder you!" because that's exactly what I meant rather than "A rough and gravely voice shouted, 'I'll murder you!'" (Though people growling dialogue would be another one in general, probably, but that's not what I'm focusing on.)] By definition, a fist is a clenched hand! It's so stupid. But "balled his hands" sounds so lame. And I could use hundreds of words that show he's angry (and often do as well), but in the movie in my head, he's ready to punch 90% of the time, so y'all should know that too. I don't have a good solution for this one. I 100% know that it's bad and I do it abundantly.
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I get what you're saying, but "clenched" sounds so much better than "made a fist" or "balled his hands." Clenched is more powerful and descriptive; it shows anger and frustration. To me, that makes up for it being a bit redundant. You could always say he "clenched his hands into fists" instead.
RokofAges75:
--- Quote from: FrickingKaos on February 27, 2021, 04:14:42 PM ---In Figured You Out when Howie figures out that Valerie and Lucy are the same person, and the boys do detective work to find where Nick is. I think that chapter was one of my favorites in that story.
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Yes! That was such a fun story. I still think of it whenever the song Figured You Out pops up on my playlist.
--- Quote from: mare on February 27, 2021, 05:51:33 PM ---The scene where Brian remembers writing the word MINE on Nick’s arm
In closing, I’m very dark lol
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Iconic!! You've written so many great stories, but you will always be known for MINE around here LOL. Team Dark forever!
nicksgal:
--- Quote from: RokofAges75 on February 27, 2021, 07:52:03 PM ---Presenting a list of Google's synonyms for body parts and fluids:
penis: mickey, lunch box, pizzle
breast: norks
butt: jacksie, bahookie
vomit: pavement pizza
feces: whoopsies, jobbies, night soil
Those are the best ones I found. :D (And yes, my sense of humor is about as mature as my 9-year-old students.)
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WTF?!? LMFAO! Several more of them were funny, but those are the ones that stood out as hilariously confusing.
--- Quote from: RokofAges75 on February 27, 2021, 07:52:03 PM ---I get what you're saying, but "clenched" sounds so much better than "made a fist" or "balled his hands." Clenched is more powerful and descriptive; it shows anger and frustration. To me, that makes up for it being a bit redundant. You could always say he "clenched his hands into fists" instead.
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Yup! That's why I keep using it, honestly; clenched sounds better. At this point, even though I know it's a redundant department of redundancy, I've just committed to it... abundantly. That's a fun game I should have played. How many times does Nick do that in PBox? I'm sure it's plentiful.
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