I read your two chapters and left you a review on AC. Here's what I said:
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It's hard to give detailed feedback on a story when there's only two chapters to judge it by, but I will try.
Interesting start. Online relationships with Bsb are always sort of intriguing because most of us can put ourselves in that place... we've got online friends, we chat with people we don't really know, and we wonder, what if...?
I think you did a great job at making Iris's reaction in this chapter realistic. I would be weirded out by the way this random guy commented on my journal and then IMed me too.
On the grammar side of things, one thing you really want to watch is staying in one tense. You keep jumping between past and present, and it makes the story kind of choppy and confusing.
Hope that helps!
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Like Julilly said, don't be discouraged because you haven't gotten much feedback yet. You only have two chapters up; it really isn't a lot to go off of for readers wanting to invest in a new story. It's hard to think of detailed feedback for only two chapters, unless the opener is really intense or unique or something. I usually wait until more of the stoy is up, and if I get into it, then I review.