Date: 10/11/10 06:33 pm Title: Chapter 21
I have finally started reading this and am now all caught up. I really like it so far, it's very interesting and well written. I really enjoy Nick's dreams and how we as the reader get to experience them and be confused right along with Nick. I also really liked when Max showed up when the guys ordered pizza - that part was really good! Also when they were just sitting there eating with him, I could feel the tension. There were also a lot of really funny bits, mostly involving AJ. I liked the part where they performed for the clowns and Nick said that it was probably AJ's vision of hell.. lmao. And awesome that you wrote that bit before the George Lopez thing! I also laughed when they thought Nick was asleep and he suggested they play truth or dare. One thing I always love about your writing are the dramatic bits and then the random funny bit, it just works so well.
Anyway, this is awesome and I can't wait for the next update! I need to know what happened to Kevin! Great story! Keep it up :)
Author's Response: Aww thanks! I'm so glad to know you're enjoying the story. Thanks for all the compliments. It means a lot to me. I had an LOL moment when I heard AJ's story about the clowns on George Lopez and I try really hard to blend in comedy especially when a story gets a bit intense at times. Thanks for reading! Another chapter is coming tonight. :O)
Sorry I am responding so late. I never got a notification about your review *kicks site*
Date: 10/10/10 05:17 pm Title: Chapter 21
First of all, I don't know how anyone could not enjoy this story, it's amazing!!! Maybe it's to do with the recent page problem and people not having it as a favourite.
But anyway, I'm loving it! This chapter was amazing and had me on the edge of my seat. I really thought someone was going to catch Nick and AJ in the bathroom, but glad they didn't. Also liked what you said about the British papers, yes, they would've made a big deal about it like they always do with celebrity stories.
I think whoever was in the room started the fire as a distraction so that he could go and search Max's room more thoroughly. I'm hoping he didn't get the briefcase. As for Kevin, noooooooooooo, please don't let anyone have taken him, lol.
Author's Response: Thanks Steph. I was just having a downer moment lol I was going back andforth whether or not to have Aj and Nick caught. Hey escaped this time around. We'll see if Kevin is that lucky! lol
Date: 10/10/10 09:54 am Title: Chapter 21
I'm still reading this story! And I still love it. I've just been busy so I'm reading it a few chapters at a time and nog reviewing each of them. But I love the direction it's taken, but I don't like it so much that they now 'lost' Kevin... I hope he's okay!
Author's Response: You can blame my power going out for Kevin. I had originally written soemthign completely different but I lost it when I lost power. I decided to take my frustrations out on Kevin lol Thanks for sticking with the story! :O)
Date: 10/10/10 02:07 am Title: Chapter 21
Oh shit, where's Kevin?! I had the same bad feeling as Nick the whole rest of the chapter after the fire alarm went off. Definitely doesn't seem like a coincidence. Can't wait to see what's going to happen next! I hope you can get a chapter written by next Saturday. I'm still reading; I just fell behind on everyone's stories this week and was waiting for the weekend to catch up. I loved both of the latest chapters!
Author's Response: Thanks Julie. I hope to get it done tool We'll see. I'm going to try to write tomorrow and I do have one page written already so yay to that.
Date: 10/10/10 02:05 am Title: Chapter 21
HOW DID I MISS THIS CHAPTER LAST TiME UPDATE SOON PLEASE!
Author's Response: LOL thanks. Hopefully next weekend. :O)
Date: 10/10/10 02:00 am Title: Chapter 20
Ooh, this chapter was really suspenseful toward the end! So Jane has really been alive all this time? Weird... Wonder if she's one of the bad guys? I never know with your stories LOL. I loved the banter between AJ and Nick throughout this chapter. Great update! Reading on...
Author's Response: Thanks Julie. I felt the need to give AJ and Nick a little bonding time. I feel like i've neglected poor AJ in this story.
Date: 10/10/10 01:39 am Title: Chapter 21
Weird. Your story didn't show up on the Most Recent page :( Anyway, I don't know why you worry about feedback, Mare! You're way harsh on yourself! I mean, what if your readers are flakes like me, where we only review every so often when we find the time? I read three updates of yours at once just because my brain is overloaded with school, but that doesn't mean I'm not reading it! Lighten up on yourself, Mare! This story is excellent, especially now that Kevin is missing and the briefcase is out there somewhere *dun dun dun* Anyway, it was nice seeing AJ and Nick's relationship, and how they all went outside with Nick when he was feeling anxious. IDK what they're going to do now without Kevin, but I'm looking forward to your next update!
Author's Response: Yeah, my story isn't showing up on most recent. I keep getting weird error messages. I'm not sure what it is about this story. I have never been as hard on myself with any other one for some reason. I just don't have the fanfic writing confidence I used to have I guess? I'm in a weird funk. It's like this story is playing with my mind or something. lol I have no idea. I wish I could explain it. It's stupid, I know lol I need some paxil. I think Nick's anxiety in this story is just rubbing off on me. Hopefully nothing else will. I don't need some psycho setting anything on fire. :OP
Date: 10/10/10 01:37 am Title: Chapter 21
Love the direction you're going in! Very interested to see where Kevin went. Hopefully he's ok. Poor Nick having an anxiety attack...you described that very well. Loved the beginning with Nick and Aj in the tub together. Can totally picture that! Lol
Author's Response: Thanks Sel :O)
Date: 10/10/10 01:34 am Title: Chapter 1
Double Rainbow is me, btw LMAO. I have a really bad habit of reviewing your stuff while I'm signed in there...
Still, don't let yourself get discouraged by a review count. Like Julilly said on the forums, you don't need reviews to tell you you're a good writer. You just are :)
Author's Response: I figured that out from the last time. It's not the review count that bothers me. it's lack of reviews from who I think are my regular readers. The ones who consistantly review after every chapter but then sudden'y don't. Those people know when I update. Like I said, i'm in a funk and not myself.
Date: 10/10/10 01:25 am Title: Chapter 21
OMG!!!! Wow this is getting good! Where did Kevin go? And poor Nicky! I think the fire alarm was deliberate. Can't wait for more!
Author's Response: Thanks for reading.
Date: 10/09/10 11:57 pm Title: Chapter 21
Ack! Kevin, where's Kevin? And I agree about the whole "fire" thing, that is WAY too much of a coincidence to have happened by accident.
And no worries, I think the problem is partly the fact its not showing up on the most recent. It does help, having people see it there. But I love it. :) so don't you dare change anything or stop writing! :P
Author's Response: Thanks Rose. I actually completely changed this chapter form what it was supposed to be already. It worked much better this way though. Thanks for reading!
Date: 10/08/10 04:57 am Title: Chapter 1
i love this story update please...lol at kevin=BIBLEBOY
Author's Response: Thanks for the review :)
Date: 10/05/10 09:16 am Title: Chapter 20
I'm glad AJ went with him, but wonder what the story is with Jane Carter? Maybe she wanted out of it so they faked her death? Or maybe she was an undercover agent? I wonder if Max is the one at the door, hmm ... Can't wait for more!
Author's Response: Thanks for reading Steph! :O)
Date: 10/03/10 05:19 pm Title: Chapter 20
HAHA! Dufoburger!!! Love that you threw that in there! So, Jane is alive and well...interesting. Can't wait to see WHY she is and why Nick is left in the dark. I love this story!
Author's Response: Yeah. Brian has been saying that for years. I have always loved the dufoburger thing. Thanks for the feedback Jen! It's always nice to know who is reading this. :O)
Date: 10/03/10 06:08 am Title: Chapter 20
Holy hell at all the information packed into this chapter. I did NOT expect Jane Carter to still be alive.
But her being evil....that I'm expecting LOL.
Not sure what to say, cause I'm seriously still processing a few things. Random@ Nick being born in Kentucky LOL.
I am NOT a fan of your cliffhangers! Grrrr! So not cool! LOL. :P You better have that chapter finished by next Saturday or you're in big trouble :)
Author's Response: I finished it last night :O) Although i'm sure it will change at least a thousand times before I post it like this one did lol and blame Nick for Jane being alive. He won that battle in the end. Thanks for reading, Rose!
