Date: 06/06/14 09:07 pm Title: Chapter 30: Nick
Aww, poor Nick. I'm really glad that you chose Nick to be so vulnerable in this chapter. He does seem like the type of guy who tends to have delayed reactions to things. And of course I was happy he laid into the bodyguard when he started laughing. That made ME mad lol I hope the guys realize Kevin & Howie are in trouble because lord knows they can't depend on Joey to figure it out!
Author's Response: Nick does always strike me as being a bit behind. I felt like it was time for him to realize the severity of the situation though. All of the other guys are freaked out and it was time for Nick to get on board. LOL
Date: 06/04/14 06:27 am Title: Chapter 30: Nick
Poor Nick! I can understand how it would only become real for him now. Despite the earlier threatening notes, the danger must have seemed remote to him since he hadn't experienced an initial shock of thinking his close friend was dead, as did the others.
Brian's role of comforting Nick in this chapter is a nice turnaround from the earlier scene where Nick has to hold and reassure him. I feel it's this newfound honesty and directness between them that allows Brian to deal with Nick's outburst and at the same time tell him something likely to upset him further. Nicely written!
Tony's reaction to the note and to Joey's not picking up (if that is indeed what happened) have me second-guessing my earlier assumption about both bodyguards being in on it. The slow-car story is plausible, and I was surprised that Tony (apparently) called the note in to the police without any prompting. Maybe there is yet hope!
Just one thing: sometimes I wonder, when there is a lack of specifics in your narration, whether it's because (a) it's not important to the story; (b) the chapter's narrator wasn't paying close enough attention; or (c) the resulting ambiguity is useful to mislead the reader or prompt our jumping to whatever conclusion you wish to encourage. Not that I expect an answer per se... I realize you are essentially writing mystery novel here and it's up to us, as readers, to do the sleuthing!
Can't wait to find out what's happening next. :)
Author's Response: You pose an interesting question. If I had to choose a response, I would probably go with option C. I don't really want things to come off as too predictable, but I don't want to lead you down the completely wrong path either. Another reason may simply be because I have forgotten and/or failed to realize that I need to include certain specifics. This is my first attempt at writing in the "suspense" genre and it's taking some getting used to. I really want to thank you for asking that question; it has really made me think about my writing and how my narrators are coming across. Thanks for the feedback!
Date: 06/03/14 03:33 am Title: Chapter 30: Nick
Oh boy!!! There ya go keeping me on my toes again!!! Cant wait to see what happens!!
Author's Response: I had to keep some mystery surrounding Tony ... I didn't want to reveal too much right away. Where's the fun in that?? LOL I'm glad that you are looking forward to more. I hope to have another chapter up sometime this week.
Date: 06/03/14 02:43 am Title: Chapter 1: AJ
amazing story! I'm hooked, can't wait to read more :)
Author's Response: Yay!! I'm thrilled that you are enjoying it so far! Thanks for taking the time to leave a comment. I really appreciate the feedback.
Date: 06/02/14 09:23 pm Title: Chapter 30: Nick
Ok... So either Tony isn't in on it or is playing Nick, Brian and a.j. Hmm. Not sure what to think about him at this moment. I kind of hope he's not in on it. But if he's not, he may bite the dust right? I do wonder if he's lying about the old couple. Hmmmmm, hmmmm some more. Hmmmms everywhere! You see what you do to me? Hahaha love it though
Author's Response: Tony, Tony, Tony, what are you up to? I'm glad that you are a bit confused about him at this point as that was my intent. You will find out his involvement or lack there of within the next few chapters. Until then, I will leave you with your thoughts. :P
Date: 06/01/14 08:27 am Title: Chapter 29: Kevin
I CALLED IT!!! Sorry for not checking in for a while. Work has been insane and i am usually really good at leaving feedback, but for some reason i have been reading and forgetting to review. Bad Tracy.
Anyways. Eventually i will review the other chapters so i can comment but loving this story SO much. I knew Joey and Tony were in on it the whole time. The first thing that tipped me off was the fact that they were roaming the boys house in the middle of the night. I am really excited for a female villain because you do not often see that (I did it myself in Figured You Out) but there is so much you can do with it. I also love the psychological turmoil you're putting them through. Cant wait for more!
Author's Response: It's good to see you on the review list again. No worries about not having the time to review all of the chapters. I know how it can be when work gets crazy. It's nice to know that you are still reading and enjoying where the story is going! I think I've only ever read one other story with a female villain, so I thought that I would give it a shot and see how it goes. I love that everyone is loving the fact that the boys are going through some mental anguish. Hahaha!
Date: 05/31/14 06:01 pm Title: Chapter 29: Kevin
Yay! Nothing beats a good old fashioned evil female villain! And once again...see boys? This is what you get for leaving that house!! Well thank goodness Joey is a bad guy and Tony as well (I am assuming lol) I like the fact that you put Kevin and Howie in danger. The two that the others tend to go to for help. Very nice! And just letting you know that the reading challenge has officially started, so try to make your way to the forum at least once a week. (usually the weekend) to see if there are updates etc... :O) That was my tweet to you! LOL
Author's Response: LOL - Thanks for the "tweet". See? That was sooo much easier than me actually having a Twitter account. :P I debated for awhile about who I would have be captured first. Originally, I was thinking of making Nick be the first one, but then I decided that was too predictable so I went with the "old guys".
Date: 05/31/14 03:18 am Title: Chapter 28: AJ
Oh silly boys! When will we learn not to leave this house? And once again Tony and or Joey prove an epic fail! At this point they better be part of the bad guys because it's getting hard to believe that two people so stupid would be put in charge of taking care of the Backstreet Boys. He just lets them leave without following them and he doesn't realize they are being watched? Yeah, he's guilty! lol
On another note, whenever I read one of your chapters, I find myself getting hungry! Loved your descriptions of them cooking while talking about Howie and Kevin. You know, I was a little bummed that Nick didn't go with Howie and Kevin, but I enjoyed this chapter so much more because Nick was in it. You did make AJ very entertaining to read, which for me personally is a challenge! Nicely done! and I must add a random, poor Howie! ;-P
Author's Response: I thoroughly enjoy the fact that different writers have trouble writing different boys. I love how you capture Kevin and Howie in your stories, because I find them SO hard to write. It baffles me that you don't like writing AJ as he's one of my favourites. :P I suppose that's why there's something out there for everyone when it comes to fan fic. Anyways, Tony and Joey are not the sharpest tools in the shed. Period. LOL
Date: 05/30/14 02:13 pm Title: Chapter 29: Kevin
YES! YES! YES!!!!! it finally happened!! I knew it! Joey does seem suspicious, who knows, Tony might be involved too. I am sooo psyched up right now. You don't disappoint with the chapters you post. Always leaving us readers looking forward for more. :) Now I wonder, will Kevin & Howie make it back to Brian, Nick & AJ? Or will something happen to the 3 of them as well that will bring them to where Howie & Kevin are. Also, your mind games are wonderful! Psychological trauma is your first tactic with the boys, that will cause damage to their physical strength as well. Now Im very much excited how things will no flow from this chapter onwards. :) Im looking forward for some painful action too. Oh wow! I really love your story. ^_^ I hope you'll post the next chapter soon. :D
Author's Response: Hahaha! I think it's amazing that you're so thrilled that Howie and Kevin have been captured. The poor guys are in trouble and you're jumping with excitement. Too funny! You will have to wait and see if Brian, Nick, and AJ suffer the same fate as their older brothers. :P Also, there is definitely some "painful action" ahead.
Date: 05/30/14 05:13 am Title: Chapter 29: Kevin
OMG!!!! I knew he was in on it i just knew it!!! I cannot wait for an update!!
Author's Response: Hahahaha - poor Joey, everyone had him pegged for a bad guy right away. Update is on the way, but not until next week.
Date: 05/30/14 01:58 am Title: Chapter 29: Kevin
So, everyone's in on it! It's too bad Howie and Kevin had to get caught to find out. I'm sort of glad, though--this means that AJ's, Brian's and Nick's instincts were right on in the chapter where they had to fend off the 'intruders' in the dark--the bodyguards really were harbouring malicious intent.
This female villain is intriguing. Now that we seem to have met the brains behind the operation--by comparison, at least--I definitely want to know more about her motivations. It seems personal, at the very least.
I surmise that Kevin and Howie are going to be held somewhere until the rest of the boys can be kidnapped, too. If this is a personal issue, it seems that the killer wants to instill as much fear into her victims as possible. Now that she is close to having them all under control, it would seem that the best way would be to have them together to do that.
I like how Kevin tried to keep a rational head in this chapter even though he admits he's just as freaked out as Howie. I think I'm going to have to go back to look for clues in the other notes, too!
I hope the others manage to get their note to the detectives... assuming they can be trusted. :O
Really looking forward to what happens next!
Author's Response: Yes, everyone is in on it! It's too bad that the boys weren't able to pick up on all of the clues as well as my readers. LOL I thought that a female villain was the way to go. If anyone were to have some kind of "beef" with the boys, that person would most likely be a woman (simply judging by their fan base). Anyways, I'm glad that you're looking forward to the next update. I intend to have it up by sometime next week.
Date: 05/29/14 11:40 pm Title: Chapter 29: Kevin
I knew those 2 guards had to be in on it somehow! The way they kept getting the notes..too much of a coincidence. My suspicions were confirmed when Kevin and Howie got their note in the diner. And I also thought it was very strange that they would let Nick, Brian and AJ go for a run...alone, even tho they were allowed to roam around freely, which I also found very strange.
Ok..so now we know the who...we just gotta find out the WHY. And also, I thought they were pretty stupid for not insisting that their families be safeguarded as well. I mean really, they were sitting ducks!
LOOOOOOOOOVING this story so much! I get so excited when I see an update and can't WAIT to see the WHY now!!!!
GREAT JOB!!!
Author's Response: Everyone was suspicious of the bodyguards!! LOL I love that you picked up on Joey's involvement during the diner scene. I figured that most people would start to clue in more definitively around that point. Yes, the WHY now becomes the big question, doesn't it? Why would someone want to hurt the boys? What did they do? You'll have to wait and see. I'm so glad that you're continuing to read and I'm thrilled that you're excited for the updates. It makes me all warm and fuzzy inside!
Date: 05/29/14 10:10 pm Title: Chapter 1: AJ
Btw... I meant bad news... I dont know if I got auto corrected or that martini I had for lunch is hitting me. But he may be bad knees too. Who knows
Author's Response: LOL - I figured that it had been an auto-correct mistake. Although, it did make me smile. Where do you work that you're able to have a martini at lunch?? That sounds like a pretty sweet deal to me!!
Date: 05/29/14 10:05 pm Title: Chapter 29: Kevin
Oh no! They got them. I knew that bastard was bad knees. Argh. How many people are in on this? Why do they want to harm the guys? I can't wait to find out. Is Brian, aj, Nick going to have to come to the rescue? Or are they captured too? Eek. Can't wait to see where you will take us next.
Author's Response: I seriously love that this chapter has produced so many questions. ;p You will find out the motive behind their capture in a little while. I don't intend to give anything away too soon. (I have to keep people in suspense ...). Will Nick, AJ, and Brian be able to come to the rescue? Are they smart/strong enough?? Hmmmmm
Date: 05/29/14 09:26 pm Title: Chapter 17: Howie
OMG so this weirdo is going to go after the others too? They'll have to go into hiding won't they? Oh god, I hope no one else gets hurt, but I'm sure it won't be that simple will it :(
Poor Howie having to ignore Leigh's call.
Author's Response: You should know by now that nothing in the fan fiction world is ever that simple. Baahahahaha! I also felt badly for Howie having to ignore his wife. You could really tell that it was killing him.
