Date: 05/29/14 09:18 pm Title: Chapter 16: Brian
Oooh bad boy swearing Brian...I like it! And Leighanne is still a cow (and yes I'm British).
Aw I do love the Frick and Frack stuff, so cute!
Author's Response: Every once and a while I like to have Brian drop the f-bomb. :) I have a friend who is married to a British man and she always uses the word "cow" to describe people. It cracks me up every time!
Date: 05/29/14 08:40 pm Title: Chapter 28: AJ
I like how in this chapter AJ gives thought to how falliable the guys are, in their different ways. It's nice how he looks at someone in a given situation and also deduces why they act that way. But you made it funny, too--the kitchen fire and Howie antic story was pretty hilarious! I totally enjoyed the moments of 'bonding', and Nick's plans for his estate were devilish and sweet all at once-just like him.
I really enjoyed how the scene shifted from the everyday, comfortable context of a morning run to the frightening experience of being followed by a suspicious car.. even in broad daylight, you managed to inject a dark element of terror. I wasn't sure the boys were going to make it!
The note element definitely shows that the whole scenario was premeditated and that the house is no longer safe--they're being watched, and even herded. And yet, I wonder if they will show the note(s) to the bodyguards. Big if, in my opinion.
I was a bit surpised by how you had Brian wheezing.. maybe just to emphasize how hard they ran, which I can go with. Maybe for extra drama. Or maybe there's something else going on. ;)
Thanks for continuing to write!
I'd better go find out what Kevin has been up to in the next chapter...
Author's Response: I'm glad that you appreciated the moments of normalcy: reminiscing about old times, making breakfast, a morning run. I really wanted to capture how quickly things can change; how volatile the guys' situation really is at the moment. Based on your review, it seems as though I managed to do what I set out to do. Thanks for that! Brian's wheezing was simply to emphasize how hard they ran. There's nothing going on health wise with him (at least not in this particular story). Also, I enjoyed your use of the word "herded" ... nice imagery.
Date: 05/28/14 11:43 pm Title: Chapter 27: Howie
Awe, there was so much win in this chapter.I love when Howie and Kevin get a little of the spotlight. Poor Howie! I felt so bad for him and how he thinks he's perceived by everyone. It really must be hard being in a five person group when one really stands out above the rest and the others are kind of left in the dust. Howie does seem like the forgotten one. Also loved the conversation about gay Brian and Nick lol Hrmm...wonder who it was that heard them. Love how Joey just waits in the car. FAIL!
Author's Response: I'm really trying to make sure that each boy gets at least a little bit of attention in this story. I actually enjoyed writing that Howie and Kevin moment. Although, I struggled like you would not believe to get Howie's thoughts to come out the way that I thought they should be. I seriously wonder if he does feel like he is constantly being overlooked. All Joey gets from me is a head shake. He seriously needs to get off his butt and do his job ... properly!
Date: 05/27/14 08:52 pm Title: Chapter 28: AJ
Oh God. You've got me in a state, a wild wild state. I can imagine these fools running in a panic trying to get away. There's got to be multiple people in on this right? Why would Tony let them go on a run Alone? He's not really a good bodyguard. He needs a new line of work. I thought Brian was gonna have a heart attack after that run. The stress alone would send me straight to the hospital. Put running on top of that. Forget it, send me to the morgue. I am excited at how your story is progressing. You keep building me up for sure. Ending this review with a woop woop!
Author's Response: I agree that Tony is probably not cut out to be providing any type of security for anyone. LOL - Although, I doubt that he is smart enough for any other line of work. I am like you in the sense that running would send me straight to the hospital. I can run really fast for about 100m and then I'm tapped out. If I had been running for my life with the "fools", they would have had to leave me on the side of the road. There's no way that I could have kept up. Haha! Ending my response with a "woop woop" right back!
Date: 05/27/14 08:27 pm Title: Chapter 28: AJ
Oh boy what a chapter. This story always has me on my toes! I wonder who the person in the car is i cannot wait to read more!
Author's Response: Glad to hear that I have you on your toes. That was pretty much my intention with this chapter. :P
Date: 05/26/14 11:38 am Title: Chapter 26: Brian
Oh, Leighanne! I don't blame Brian for being so embarrassed by her and her shenanigans and of course the reporters aren't helping at all. I don't get why reporters do that in general, I mean they have to realize that the guys are still in danger! I know, they report, that's there job, they are still stupid for doing it though! I kind of hope Kevin and Howie do not tell Joey and Tony they are going anywhere! Oh, and you asked if they come off as mean. I don't feel like they are mean. I feel like they are bad at their job. Not the sharpest tools in the shed lets say. LOL
Author's Response: OMG - You just left me my 200th review!! That's so insane! Sometimes I don't know how reporters can live with themselves at the end of the day. Like you said, it is their job to tell a story, but I feel as though they need to learn when to keep quiet. I can't stand when the media presents damaging information about people ... don't they realize that these are people's lives that they are essentially destroying? LOL - Joey and Tony are definitely a few fries short of a Happy Meal. Poor guys ...
Date: 05/24/14 09:50 am Title: Chapter 27: Howie
Well, I'd say that getting threatening messages directly is much better than receiving them through the police!
I'd surmise that whoever is looking for the Boys got wind of the 'new gay couple in town' story, but I'm sure it would have been one thing, if not another. And this lends credence to AJ's suspicion that there was someone actually creeping around outside, i.e., aside from the bodyguards. If whoever it is has followed them from the house, or will follow them back since Kevin and Howie are evidently being watched in the diner, then this should get interesting pretty fast. Too bad about the lack of cell phones to communicate in situations like this.
Otherwise, I liked Howie's attempt to address his issues about his role in the group, and Kevin's assurance that he is on 'team Howie'. I wonder if this will stave off any future meltdowns... but I doubt it. ;)
Hope you'll write more soon!
Author's Response: Poor Howie. I liked how you used the word "attempt" because, once again, he has tried and essentially failed to express how he feels. I really do feel bad for him sometimes, and not just in the context of this story. Things are about to pick up in terms of the action. I am a couple of chapters ahead of what I have posted, so I have a good idea of what is going to happen next. Thanks so much for all of your comprehensive reviews!
Date: 05/24/14 09:20 am Title: Chapter 26: Brian
Wow, this was great!
I thought Brian's reaction and way of dealing with the situation was spot on, but I was pleasantly surprised when you had him own up to what he was doing... and I like the fact that Nick had to stand up to him to get him to do it. I think you're doing a wonderful job developing/evolving their friendship.. heck, of all of them. ;)
I'm also liking the plan to go out and get weapons, however wise or not that might be. I guess we'll find out. Maybe they should wear disguises, with this being all over the news, and even people in this small town doubtless having at least some idea of who the BSB are.
Well, I'm off to read your latest chapter. So glad you're continuing to write!
Author's Response: I enjoyed flipping their roles during that exchange. It felt nice to write Nick as the reasonable one and Brian as the whiner. The idea of Kevin and Howie trooping into town in disguises just made me crack up. Knowing the two of them, their disguises would probably be super lame and not do a thing to conceal their identities.
Date: 05/24/14 07:54 am Title: Chapter 25: Kevin
Sorry for the delay... I just haven't had the time to keep up with my readings lately. ;)
Well, character interaction and plot development... how could it get any better? I like your characterization of Kevin in this chapter--his inclination to take charge shows through, but also his underlying insecurities, which makes me like him more. I found his dynamic with Brian as you portrayed it to be quite interesting, and it seemed likely for Brian to try to see this situation in a positive light, and wanting to fix his relationship with his cousin. I wonder about your citing Kevin's feelings of resentment and whether it would be more believable that he harbours them because he expected a stronger reaction from Brian when he returned, rather than when he left. But then, not all emotional reactions make sense. ;)
I also noticed the detectives' shift from talking about a 'killer' (singular) to 'killers' (plural). Maybe they're just being as general as possible, but I wondered if it means they know more than they are letting on.
I thought it was pretty funny how all the guys were like, 'just disable all our wives' Twitter accounts!' But on a more serious note, things are really not going well for Brian in the Leighanne department, are they? I'm intrigued to know more.
You're providing just enough hints to keep me wondering and guessing... great work!
Author's Response: No need to apologize. I know that life can be crazy at times. It feels like I have had virtually no times for anything myself lately. I find Kevin almost as hard to write as Howie, so I'm quite pleased that you liked how I portrayed him. I like your take on the whole Kevin expecting more from Brian when he returned as opposed to when he left. I never thought of it that way, but now I feel as though you may be right. I wonder what Brian's actual reaction was to his cousin rejoining the group. Twitter annoys me. I wouldn't care if it just disappeared forever. LOL
Date: 05/23/14 04:00 pm Title: Chapter 27: Howie
And my heart rate shot up... aww man!! your killing me crazy with the suspense cliffies. haha! But still, gotta admit this is what's making me look out for your updates daily. Yes, i am pretty much obsessed with this story of yours. I am extremely curious as who is this guy threatening the boys! It could just be anyone from anywhere. yes, the police can be involved, and by the description you wrote on Joey it is very hard to believe that he is not involved. But to think that the person or men pursuing the boys still hasn't made any physical damage makes him much incredibly difficult to read. I wonder if your story will also be a mind game, as it is physical. because, receiving threats even though the police tried to hide them, meant that the man hunting the boys has ears and eyes watching their every move. and gosh! he just found out exactly where they are hiding right now! he was able to send the mystery letter personally to Howie! Oh, this is crazy!!! but i like it. haha!!! XD im just so hooked! thank you very much for your constant updates and replies to our reviews. it makes me feel happy, reading your replies and of course, your stories. thank you! :)
Author's Response: I'm so flattered that you're looking for the updates on a daily basis. I hope to get another chapter up in the next day or so. I've just finished moving, so everything is crazy in my life at the moment. It's interesting that you mentioned that some of the torture might be mental as opposed to physical. I was just writing a chapter where mind games play a role. It's like you read my mind!
Date: 05/23/14 08:18 am Title: Chapter 1: AJ
More more more!! The suspense is killing me lol, the way those boys were kinda relaxing for a bit blabbering away and listening in on that coversation was great, I could totally picture them there (btw ofcourse Brian is attractive, doh) and then that noten at the end, omg!!
Author's Response: Ha! I love the little side note that you snuck in about Brian. He's gorgeous!! *drools* I hope to have another chapter up soon. Until then, I like leaving you in suspense. *evil laugh*
Date: 05/23/14 05:35 am Title: Chapter 27: Howie
I imagined Howie and Kevin sitting there listening to this conversation like a bunch of women for some reason hoping for some good gossip or something lol! But I cannot wait for another update to see what happens next! This story always keeps me on my toes!
Author's Response: LOL - That's totally how I pictured them while I was writing the chapter. Like, they would be leaning over and straining to hear the conversation while still trying not to draw attention to themselves. :)
Date: 05/23/14 04:22 am Title: Chapter 27: Howie
Oh wow. Wonder if Kristen read the note or is a part of this? Cray cray chapter there! UPDATE SOON!
Author's Response: The waitress being in on it?? Hmmmm I like that idea ...
Date: 05/23/14 04:15 am Title: Chapter 26: Brian
Excellent chapter. Very well done though Brian did seem a bit kiddish in this one. From strangling someone to sulking? Lol nice range of emotions.
Author's Response: Hahahaha - Brian comes across as being someone who could be totally up one minute and totally moody the next. His range of emotions seems the widest to me out of all of the boys. You're right though, he did come across as a bit of a whiny brat in this chapter. :P
Date: 05/23/14 01:40 am Title: Chapter 27: Howie
ok awwww to the Kevin and Howie broment. Yes, Kevin bring Howie back up... Only to have their stalker to bring him back down. I love diners like that, great service, lots of food for cheap cheap. No matter where they this stalker, or is it stalkers, will find the guys. They are gonna have to face this head on. They are not going to get the proper protection from the security guards or police. I mean, this guy or girl, got this close already. Yikes... Again a yikes. Lol. Lovely update.
Author's Response: I felt like it was time for Kevin and Howie to get in on the bromance. The other three have been enjoying most of it so far. :) There isn't any of those diners close to where I live (one of the downfalls of living in a major city, I suppose), but I always thought that it would be nice to have a cheap, local place to go to where everyone knows your name. I love how you ended this review with a "yikes". Tee Hee
