Reviewer: RokofAges75 Signed [Report This]
Date: 10/18/10 12:36 pm Title: If i knew then

I was wondering more how old you were than how long you'd been writing. The kind of mistakes you're making are not the mistakes of an amateur fanfic writer; they're the mistakes of someone who is not remembering to use the basic conventions they should have learned in elementary school. I'm not trying to insult you or make you feel stupid, just remind you that those conventions exist and need to be followed. Our criticism is constructive; we're telling you what kinds of things need to be fixed, and Mare marked up one of your summaries with places where corrections need to be made. That would be a good place to start. I'm glad you have someone who can help you, and if you have any specific questions, just ask, and you'll get a specific answer. The forum is also a good place to go to get help. We would like to see all writers continue to post their work here; it just needs to be edited so that readers can enjoy it.

Author's Response: Im 20 years old. Im sorry that you feel this way. I do find this review very offence Because to me when i read that it feels like your telling me i need to go back to school and that is a very touchy subject with me. considering i was kicked out of my school for teen pregnancy. I feel i am smart and don't need to go back to school because even thought all the problems i have went threw im a 20 year old that owns and runs a very successful business. I know you don't know that but to me saying something like that is offence to anyone when you don't know them personally. Like i said in the past im very sorry and im in the proses of getting my story fixed and yes i was pointed out on the summary and if you would kindly go see i fixed it right after the mistakes were pointed out. Like i said before im very sorry about my mistakes and im getting them fixed. thank you

Reviewer: Rose Signed [Report This]
Date: 10/18/10 05:38 am Title: If i knew then

About the summary, I was thinking of your "Two Fathers", but I mentioned it in here since you kept Mare's review here. You deleted Julilly's in the other one so I wanted this to all be in the same place.

No one's trying to make you feel stupid, everyone here has said repeatedly they're trying to help. I'm glad you got someone to help you, but this is what you're not getting...

No one's asking you to "fix every little thing". Punctuation, Capitalizing Names, and spell checking? Those are big things, they make the difference between a readable and unreadable story. They're things that you have to do as you write.

Here's the thing, it's your story. Do what you want, that is your right. But you say you want people to tell you how to improve. That's what we're doing. We're telling you things you should be doing as you write.

I just don't appreciate you responding as if everyone is out to get you. No one is, if we were, we would've just let you delete your stories without reviewing to give suggestions as to what to do instead and stay here.

Of course, it's up to your discretion as to whether or not you'll listen.

Author's Response: If you read the comment above yours, you will see its not the type of nicely you need to improve its more of the you need to go back to school reviews. I've told many of people im sorry and im getting it fixed and im still getting reviews. All im saying is im getting it fixed so if people could stop Leaving reviews that tear me and my story's apart that would be grateful on my end because like the review above yours are the ones that make me not want to write i find it very offence.

Reviewer: Rose Signed [Report This]
Date: 10/16/10 11:58 pm Title: If i knew then

Like RokofAges75 and Carter-Orange have said, you're not getting these notices for a few typos. I don't mean to be offensive, but the summary alone is littered with errors a simple spell/grammar checker in Microsoft word would catch. Your chapter has even more, and it's pretty clear to see little to no editing has taken place here.

I don't think it's much to ask for you to capitalize names and the beginnings of sentences. Adding proper punctuation isn't a lot either, it should go hand in hand with writing.

Not to mention, all of this is listed in the rules when you sign up, so they're not "getting too strict" as you claim, they're simply enforcing the rules because so many are choosing to break them.

You say no one's complained to you, I don't know about others, but I honestly try to be nice and not tear a story apart in a review. But if you read the forums, you'd see that a lack of editing so blatantly in this instance is bugging many people. When you write and post, keeping your readers in mind shouldn't be so surprising. Because if you want feedback, your readers do have some expectations in terms of presentation.

Once again, I'm not trying to be mean, but I am trying to be helpful.

Author's Response: well everyone will be glad to know I have someone that would help me with all these problems. I understand but i really don't understand why people have to tear my story apart and say my summary is bad when i don't even have a summary on this story yet and for people to make me feel stupid and make me not even want to write. What no one has yet to ask is how long have i been writing? I haven't even been writing a year yet. i'm still getting use to it. But for people to tear me apart is wrong in my eyes. i feel you should be nice and tell someone how to improve not make someone feel stupid. I'm not stupid i just don't have the time sometimes to make sure every little thing is correct. im sorry for this it will be fixe

Reviewer: Carter-Orange Signed [Report This]
Date: 10/16/10 01:44 pm Title: If i knew then

This isn't negative feedback, just offering some advice. You don't need to delete your stories if you'd just take the time to make some alterations. Like using a capital letter at the start of people's names, spell check and presenting it in a better layout. Think about it from a reader's perspective :)

Hope you don't take this the wrong way, I only want to help :)

Author's Response: I know this but the one girl made me feel like i was completely stupid and i have not had one person complain about a name not be capitalized or the forum its in. i just figured that this was a website you could post your story's how you write them. im sorry but i cant spend my whole day making sure i have every single thing correct. im a single parent that runs my own company and takes care of a disabled father, i figured it would be better to go to another site

Reviewer: blueleeryan Signed [Report This]
Date: 10/16/10 09:51 am Title: Truth Behind the Mirror

omg amazing job

Reviewer: catseye1769 Signed [Report This]
Date: 10/15/10 08:07 pm Title: If i knew then

Awww. This was sweet. Now for them to work on things & for Mark to get caught. What ever happened to her other baby with Mark? Keep up the great work.
Marguerite

Author's Response: the details to it will be in chapter 6 but he beat her really bad an she miscarried. thats why she left him.

Author's Response: the details to it will be in chapter 6 but he beat her really bad an she miscarried. thats why she left him.

Author's Response: the details to it will be in chapter 6 but he beat her really bad an she miscarried. thats why she left him.

Reviewer: catseye1769 Signed [Report This]
Date: 10/15/10 06:56 pm Title: If i knew then

Ah it's been 5 years and he hasn't seen his son? WTF?!?! And what about the other baby? Man Nick you have a messed up life. Keep up the great work. And I am always available to be a beta.
Marguerite
Yes I am the ito review the new story.

Author's Response: the other baby comes up in the 2nd chapter which is up now