The story is really good though! Despite the name confusion - you did make me cry after all! I didn't even realize it at first, but then I was like, "Ah! Dammit!" Lol. I always curse when I cry - haha. But the story was wonderful.

~Lenni~

Author's Response: Thank you. You could... See my sadness... Couldn't you?

Aww that was very well written Dee. I especially loved your first paragraph, it set up the story really well. and hehehe you said loins! :OP

I was a little confused at times but again I just think it's the whole anime-ish type style, that's what it felt like to me, like I was reading or watching one of those anime cartoons. The names, for me when names are that intricate it's hard to keep up with the who is who but that's me lol The story as a whole was great. I think you'll do very well.

Author's Response: Thanks. :) Well... It seemed to fit. Haha. :D It's from the manga I created. :) So yes, it's in that style. It's honorifics... But I can understand how it could be confusing for someone without the background. *nod* I was considering changing it, but I've been working on this for like five years, so they wrote themselves that way.... *sigh* Thank you. :)

hehe, that was kind of cute. I want to take a creative writing class...

Author's Response: Thanks Kelly. :) I'm just playing archiving machine again. ;)

Love this story.

But you already knew that.

I hope you get an A+++(I know there's no such grade, lol)!!!!!!!!

Author's Response: Awwwww... Thanks Mel! :* And sure there is, it's called a 5.0... Haha. ;) (except that's GPA... but anyway...)

LOL.
I hope your presentation went well.
I thought the story was quite well written, and funny. Good luck!

Author's Response: Awwww... Thanks. :) I was in Japanese class when you responded, so your luck was still before the fact. And thankfully, I didn't actually have to read it... But they'll go home and pick apart my writing... *nervous*

Loved it! Very cute and funny! I enjoyed the characterization and the dialogue, and how the story kept coming back to the green house, and then it turned out it was a yellow house they were standing in front of the whole time... hahaha. Like I said, funny!!

Author's Response: Thanks Julie! :* And as to why the yellow house... I just thought if I were going to be nice and have them eventually find the house, that it needed a little twist. ;)