Date: 05/24/09 05:10 am Title: Dead in Your Tracks
Oh my god girl you sure know how to twist up a yarn. This story had so many turns I was getting dizzy!! I love the end tho makes the whole thing worth it! Excellent Job!
Date: 01/31/09 12:00 pm Title: Treat Me Right
i hope your little boy is doing okay...but i got a question..are you going to update anytime soon?
Author's Response: I will try to get a chapter out in the next few days.....you are now my motivation.!
Date: 12/06/08 12:16 pm Title: Treat Me Right
sorry i took my time to read...i just hadn't the time to go online
awesome chapter...although i can't understand presleys reaction when she found out nick cheat on her...i think there is more to come...it went to easy
Date: 10/26/08 06:07 pm Title: Dead in Your Tracks
Finally finshed! AJ is an asshole in this story. I hope that Presley can keep herself together this time. She can't run to AJ anytime things get a lil tough and she especially can't pull the "Oh, let me have sex with him just ONE last time" excuse cuz I think se used that about three times during this story alone. I hope that now that she's a mother she calms down some.
For a first attempt at a fic I definitely saw improvement in your writing from beginning to end. Presley definitely was a lil Mary Sue in the fact that EVERY guy wanted her (and even a girl lol) To me personally that gets a little annoying. There was plenty of drama although you want to be careful that it doesn't get TOO over the top. All in all though it definitely wasn't horrible by any means. The more you write the better you become as a writer.
And it really wasn't trouble to check out your work. You always leave me such amazing reviews that I thought that it would only be fair for me to check out your stuff and return the favor.
Author's Response: Yep....I know....a little Mary Sue, but sometimes I can't help myself! SOme of my favorite fics have Mary Sue characters. With the sequel, I hope to make it a lot less Mary Sue and a lot more realistic. So far in the sequel Nick is a dick and AJ is out of the picture, and I can defiantly see a difference in my writing, but I still have a very very long way to go. I doubt that I will ever be as good as you or Kelly aka honey. You two are my absolute favs on here, plus you are also a teacher, so I am sure you have a huge vocabulary! I can write about medical stuff a lot and things to do with the military, but that is about it! Anyways, thanks so much for reading! It really means a lot to me!
Date: 10/25/08 03:20 am Title: Dead in Your Tracks
Just popping to tell you that I am still reading... LOADS of drama, huh? I'm glad that Stefanie came clean and is sorry for what she's done. I actually kind of hope she pulls through this okay.
Author's Response: I am not giving any details....you never know you may not find out how she is doing until the sequel....*hint*. I am glad you are still reading! It is a little embarassing to me, because I know that I am no where near as good of a writer as you, but I am still uber excited that you are taking the time to read about it anyways!
Date: 10/24/08 10:28 pm Title: Treat Me Right
sounds interesting...i really want to know how long nicks lie is going to be alive...i think not so long...presley is a smart girl...she'll find out...sometime...i hope
Author's Response: I know looking at it from an outsiders POV you have to wonder if Nick is really gonna be there for Presley and Sutton, because he hasn't exactly been a good boyfriend lately, but you have to remember Presley is trying to keep faith and trust in Nick. She really wants to believe that he is really gonna be there FOREVER! Thanks so much for sticking with the story!!!
Date: 10/24/08 10:19 pm Title: Treat Me Right
oh my gosh...i am so sorry for presley...her son might be dying, her boyfriens is fucking some chick and she's all alone...this is so not fair...
Author's Response: I didn't want to do this, but I couldn't find any other way to get around their personal drama and focus on their family other than having something happen to Sutton.... Hopefully Nick will get his shit together quickly, because I have a feeling that Presley is really gonna need him!
Date: 10/24/08 05:53 pm Title: Treat Me Right
what a fucking asshole...what the hell did he think when he took this girl to his hotel room? doesn't he know how bad this is going to turn out? if he wont tell presley, i will! he's such a....god i don't know...he's not worth a word right now
Author's Response: I know....what was he thinking???? Actually I don't think he was thinking at all! I think that he was angry at the situation that he and Presley are in, that he just went out and got wasted and let little Nick get in the way of BIG NICK! Thanks for continuing to read!
Date: 10/22/08 04:19 pm Title: Dead in Your Tracks
I just started reading this Brandy haha and I guess now we are even cuz just like Alyssa pisses you off Presley is pissing me off. That was very effed up fo her to suggest that Nick hook up with Stefanie. I can't help but to feel bad about Stefanie because I know exactly how it feels to be used by a guy you REALLY like just to make your friend jealous. It hits a lil close to home for me. Presley is beginning to remind me of my best friend a bit. So as of right now I am team Stefanie! I'm going to keep reading though soon.
Author's Response: Trust me.... yo won't be on team Stefanie for long....This is the first story I wrote when I picked up writing again after three years, and when I read over the first ten or so chapters in this one, it makes me cringe a little! With a writer like you, I figured you would have given up on it already! My writing gets better as you get further through it, or at least I think it does, and the writing in the sequel is much better. I have always be good with Dialogue but not so much the meat of things, so I am trying to work on that! Thanks so much for READING MEL!!!!!!
Date: 10/12/08 11:35 am Title: Treat Me Right
why are they going that to each other? they're both hurting and are trying to cover that up, by hurting the other even more. at least that's what i think they're doing...it's just so stupid.
allthough i totally can understand where nick is coming from, the thinks he throw at Presleys head are unforgiveable...she's trying to make him trust her, and all he's doing is calling her a cheater.
i don't get him...i think i never will...
but i really hope that one day nick is able to trust her...and have a family of his own under his roof
Author's Response: As much as I wanted to throw them back into this perfect relationship, that wouldn't be realistic. I think that it will take some time for Nick to trust Presley again, and by this Presley is either going to be patient with Nick or she is going to start pulling away...you will have to keep reading to find out! Thanks for the review!
Date: 10/09/08 03:47 pm Title: Treat Me Right
cant wait to see waht happens!! more more more!! x
Author's Response: I am working on the next chapter now. I am trying to get more descriptive with my writing so it is taking longer to get my chapters out! I hope you keep reading though!
Date: 10/08/08 07:32 pm Title: Treat Me Right
little sutton is going home =) ...well he's drivin home *hehe
i love to see nick and presley happy and smiling and their little one...i hope they'll have time for each other in these next weeks...
Author's Response: so you found it! Nick and Presley are smiling at each other right now, lets just hope that they continue to smile. !!! Thanks fo you comment Kati!
Date: 10/03/08 02:08 pm Title: Dead in Your Tracks
yay...finally =)
i'm so lucky for both of them...hopefully they will last longer than the first time...i want to see them raising sutton together
Author's Response: you will totally get to see them raising Sutton together! and hopefully this time around they won't have so many obstacles to over come! Thanks so much for all of your reviews Kati!! I am going to get started on the sequel in a couple of days. I already have it outlined...
Date: 09/27/08 08:01 pm Title: Dead in Your Tracks
sutton is such a cute name :) i'm so happy for them =)
Author's Response: Thanks for all of the comments....I was wondering where you were. I hadn't heard from you in a while....I love the name Sutton too. I had a friend in the Navy whose last name was Sutton and I always loved it. There are only about 5 or 6 chapters left....but I am working on the outline for the sequel, so I hope you will keep reading! Thanks Kati...as always yours reviews are appriciated!
Date: 09/27/08 07:55 pm Title: Dead in Your Tracks
that one was...wow
a lot is out in the open now, which is really good. it needed to be out
presley is getting her baby *yay*...i hope everything will be fine with her and the baby...
