Date: 09/20/18 08:51 am Title: Chapter 4
Poor Nick, I can totally picture him in this kind of situation. Ugh too bad I have to go to bed, but I will continue reading tomorrow. :)
Date: 09/20/18 08:38 am Title: Chapter 3
Gah, he issss such a pushover.
Date: 09/20/18 08:24 am Title: Chapter 1
Thought I would read this again!
Date: 06/20/14 11:27 am Title: Chapter 15
I am surprised that they didn't look into Nick a bit more but he really wasn't involved in much other than keeping an eye on her so I suppose it makes sense. Also the fact the police waited across the street made sense as well. I was a bit surprised at the little bit of romance added in but it was a nice addition for them to have a happy ending like that. I liked how Kevin offered to pay Nicks hospital bills and was really going to pay for the ransom despite Elena stating he was stingy with his money.
I really enjoyed reading this and I think I want to try more by you in the future. I had fun!
Author's Response: I think Elena's word would have been pretty convincing to clear Nick from being investigated. In the end, his hands weren't dirty. It helped that he had been kept out of things for so long because then nothing could get pinned on him!
Date: 06/20/14 11:15 am Title: Chapter 14
This scene was great with the stand off. Brian exposing her and then Nick realizing Brian isn't really his friend. I retract what I said in my last review, she did what she needed to do to escape alive. It was nice to see nick stand up for himself as well.
Author's Response: Yes, that's exactly it. Elena acted purely out of instinct for her own survival, not caring about who got in the way!
Date: 06/20/14 10:49 am Title: Chapter 13
The tension is building. I live a good suspense and action scene. It bothers me too that nobody is there when she is missing. You'd think that someone would be stationed in case she returned to the house. I am sure there is a reason for it though. I can't click next fast enough lol
Author's Response: Hopefully it all became clear to you as you read on! :)
Date: 06/20/14 10:32 am Title: Chapter 12
I liked the action in this chapter and Nick kind of taking charge was nice. Poor Elena having to stuff herself in the dumb waiter. I also enjoyed the car chase...sorry I don't have much criticism as you're a better writer than me. I am enjoying the story!
Author's Response: Haha I'm glad you've enjoyed it!
Date: 06/20/14 10:26 am Title: Chapter 11
I was not expecting them to sleep together. That was a surprise and kind of random. I wonder if tthey will manage to get away in time?
Author's Response: I really wanted it to seem like it came out of left field. I was hoping to portray it as something awkward and strange if only because it was just a tool that Elena used to control the situation and Nick just fell into the trap.
Date: 06/20/14 09:57 am Title: Chapter 10
It was nice to learn more about Brian. Although he is a dick it was nice of him to help Nick like he did. jane was an interesting addition as well.
Nick seems like he needs to really start thinking for himself, he seems to let everybody tell him what to do and it would explain a lot of his behavior.
Date: 06/20/14 09:32 am Title: Chapter 9
I enjoy your descriptions in this chapter, I could really picture how run down the place was and how bad off Elena is. However her lying to him was interesting because although Nick stood up to Brian and the guys he is still being
manipulated. I am glad he is trying to help her but I hope he realizes she's playing him too lol
Author's Response: Isn't it funny that in his effort to get away from users he ended up attaching himself to another user?
Date: 06/19/14 10:42 am Title: Chapter 8
I really really love Brian being an asshole for some reason lol. It's out of character but it is just refreshing to read him in that way that I do not mind at all. Good for Nick standing up to him as well even though he's living with his mother. I am glad he is helping Elena escape as well, it shows he isn't like the other guys. Real turning point in the story.
Author's Response: Asshole Brian is my favourite type of Brian LOL I really am not a huge fan of Brian as a character. I find he can be very flat and uninteresting so I always want to really push him outside of the mold that I feel he so often ends up in.
Date: 06/19/14 10:34 am Title: Chapter 7
Wow that was intense. It's nice that Brian feels remorse for leading Nick on like that. I found the information about Nicks father bitting him interesting, it says a lot about why he acts the way he does when bossed around by the others. I have a feeling his relationship with the guys has taken another turn. Hopefully he will start thinking for himself now.
Author's Response: I was all proud of myself for doing my survey and completely forgot I hadn't replied to your reviews! Sorry!
I think deep down Brian did have a soft spot for Nick, that it was hard to hate him given their long history.
Date: 06/14/14 08:50 am Title: Chapter 6
It is interesting how we see a bit more of Brian and his deal in this chapter. I was wondering where Kevin was but you made him Elena's dad which I did not see coming at all. I am suprised the cops dismissed him as a suspect so quickly too after Kevin said "he's just the gardener", but I am sure there is a reason for that. Can't wait to see how this plays out.
Author's Response: Me including Kevin is pretty shocking lol I wrote this before Kevin left so I must have felt compelled to add him. :P
That's an interesting point about the cops. I can't recall if there is a reason for that but you're right, maybe they should have pressed a bit further!
Date: 06/14/14 08:41 am Title: Chapter 5
I like how nick is realizing that he needs to stop letting the other guys tell him what to do and grow some damn balls. I like the pacing of the story. It flows pretty nice.
Author's Response: Thanks! The pace is something I struggled with. I sometimes find I can rush through things in an effort to get to the end or keep to the set amount of chapters I'd hoped to have.
Date: 06/12/14 09:38 am Title: Chapter 5
It was nice to see Nick stand up for himself and I like that you gave more iinsight on how Nick ended up doing what he was told. It makes a lot more sense now.
Author's Response: Glad to see it's starting to get more clear! :)
