Date: 07/04/12 01:14 pm Title: Chapter 8
That's gotta be unsettling, going back to your life after five years and acting like nothing's changed. Especially since something like that would change her.
Author's Response:
I know, it's strange why they would agree to let her come back with her memories knowing it would change her. I couldn't imagine trying to pick up my life after five years away.
Date: 07/04/12 01:11 pm Title: Chapter 7
And of course we know nothing stops here, that would be too easy lol. Good chapter though, at least she gets to be back home for a moment.
Author's Response:
Of course going home is not the end, that would be silly. LOL. She ended up in her own time frame a lot longer than I originally planned.
Date: 07/04/12 01:08 pm Title: Chapter 6
Interesting you made Howie a doctor lol. I find it a little random that the Library is so easy to access. I would think something like that would be more like Area 51, well known but heavily protected.
Author's Response:
He fit the role of the Dr. better and yes I cannot count the times that I wrote Dr. Rough instead of Dr. Dorough and have to go back and change it. LOL. It was a little homage to 00Carter in this story. LOL. I think I had an idea about why The Library was out in the open but I'm not sure I actually got it down on paper. I think a lot of times with my stories that I get into the flow of the actual plot and story that some details get waylaid. Thanks for bringing this up so I can address it in my edit. :)
Date: 07/04/12 12:55 pm Title: Chapter 5
I like how Nick's a douche, he's the good guy in too many stories. I think my problem with Julie is that she doesn't come realistically, that she doesn't have enough depth, quirks. She just comes off a bit awkward. But we're still early in this, so I'm keeping that in mind. :)
Author's Response:
I went back and forth with Nick, if I should make him the main lead or if I should give him this role. Ultimately my fondness for Kevin came barrelling through and I ended up with the set up I have now. Thanks for the review.
Date: 06/22/12 08:41 am Title: Chapter 4
LOL I spoke too soon, there's Kevin again. (Of course, after I post on the mb). Although Julie's not catching on to me, Kevin definitely is. I can easily see him being this suave knowing how he acts in real life. :)
Author's Response:
I loved writing Kevin in this story, he is one of my favorites in this story. I enjoyed giving him that suave attitude in the story. I hope you can determine what it is about Julie that is not catching for you so that you can pass that along to me so I can improve. :)
Date: 06/22/12 08:36 am Title: Chapter 3
I like the Back to the Future reference, I love that movie lol. The writing is well done, and I like the description. The only thing so far (and this is cause I'm admittedly very picky) is for some reason Julie doesn't come off very engaging. I can't put my finger on why just yet, so it could just be me.
Author's Response:
I love the Back to the Future movies too and thought that it would be a fun way to have her attempt to contact Kevin again. If you find out why she is not engaging I would love to know so that I can work on improving my characters. :)
Date: 06/22/12 08:31 am Title: Chapter 2
Interesting, I like how you explained the story through dialogue about how she ended up hopping around through time.
Author's Response:
Thanks. I thought it would flow better if I had them talk about it, it certainly flowed easier for me to have Kevin and Julie talk about how she ended up hopping through time.
Date: 05/27/12 11:11 am Title: Chapter 1
Very interesting start. I like how you just throw the readers into Julie's world without explaining everything. You give bits of info as you go and the curiosity keeps people reading on.
Author's Response:
thanks I didn't want to give too much information of what happened right away, leave people wondering a little bit. Thanks for the review.
Date: 10/28/11 09:22 am Title: Chapter 3
Oh my... loved the setup of this chapter! Reading the description of being at the beach bought back a lot of good memories of camping and that fresh sea water smell you're greeted with!
Anywho, reading this chapter toally reminded me of that movie, "Hot Tub Time Machine!", where the guy figured out that he could do cool stuff in the future, like create good or somethig!! Lmao. This is all very interesting though, and uberly cool that she's working with THE KING OF POP!! I love these twists that you're supplying is with hun! :)
Author's Response:
Being in a landlocked state I am happy to hear that I described the beach well! LOL. I don't know what it's like to camp on a beach, I have very limited experiences with the beach. LOL. As soon as I stuck her on the beach the first thing that I thought of when I wrote it was Hawaii in the '60's and when I startd researching my mind pulled Elvis out somewhere and I just HAD to use it!!!
I like to twist my stories around, my only hope is my twists work out in the end and I don't confuse the readers, too much. :) Thanks for the review Reb!
Date: 10/28/11 09:06 am Title: Chapter 2
Holy shit! This chapter was just intense!
So... this strapping gentlemen is Kevin Richardson? I should have known! >:] Again, though not much to describe, loved the vivid imagery of Julie being sick and throwing up! As I read it, it was as if I was here... hunched over some toilet, heaving out practically nothing. I swear, I HATE that feeling with a passion! >__< But my my... all that Kevin revealed to her is so interesting! It's funny, because there were some parts where I got it, and some parts where I got confused, but ended up understanding it, lol. That's what time traveling information will do to you, lol.
But, I really enjoyed this chapter, but totally bummed that Julie jumped right after Kevin finding her, revealing the news and was going to help her. Now, he has to "look" for her again. :( Poor girl.
Author's Response:
Yes, I pulled from my memory what it was like to heave with nothing to expell when I wrote that chapter. I HATE being sick like that.
I tried not to be confusing when I wrote about the time travel stuff, but it has to be a bit confusing since you are being introduced the same time as the main character and she sure as hell doesn't know what's going on. I hope the rest of the story clears up anything that might have been confusing.
I couldn't have her be saved right away now could I? What fun would that be? LOL. Thanks for the review Reb!
Date: 10/27/11 07:25 am Title: Chapter 1
Wow Lore. I'm sooo glad that I now have this WHOLE COMPLETED story for me to enjoy! Your writing is truly amazing, the way you describe even the smallest, simplest details is so vivid! What really stood out to me as you depicted the scene was the simple thing of the flashing "N" of the open sign, and the way a table was set up in the diner, with an empty pie plate and all that. You truly painted a lovely picture within our minds with this first chapter. I really like it because your descriptions aren't wordy, where it'll lose me... but it's just enough to give you a visual, and you move on.
I am truly intrigued by these gentlemen; has chilvary came to exist in the year 2020?! Lol. Can't wait to find out more about this guy. As for Julie, poor girl! She goes through a lot when she time travels, and happens to be sick now! Loved the way you described her being sick by the way... I was just reading it and nodding, like "Yup... this is exactly how I feel or what I do when I'm sick with a stomach bug" or something, lol. What a GREAT way to start off this story; just on the first chapter, and I'm already enjoying it so much! ;) Can't wait to read the rest!!
Author's Response:
aww yay a Reb review! I love all my reviewers but I love the new perspective you bring with your reviews. I told you I hunt down stories you are reading just to read your reviews, is that bad? LOL. Thanks so much for trying this story, it has been one of my favorites to write and I'm so glad to share it with people and actually find readers who enjoyed it as well. :) I hope you enjoy the rest of the story, I don't know how well I keep up the whole description "thing". Thanks again. :)
Date: 10/20/11 11:06 am Title: Epilogue
We love you too, Lore! Thank you for this amazing story. Thank you for giving us a happy ending, well this is happy for me. But I still have a feeling Nick is still alive. lol Thanks!
Author's Response:
Aw I missed responding to your review! I am glad you enjoyed the story and glad you liked the ending. As for Nick being alive you will have to keep reading Chronos Breach. :) Thanks for reading and reviewing my story Ritz, it means a lot to me that you took the time to continually read and review. :)
Date: 10/17/11 09:54 am Title: Epilogue
At first I thought you killed Kevin off! Is it mean that I am happy Nick died lol he was an idiot and a jerk anyway. Great story and loved the ending!
Author's Response: It was supposed to sound like Kevin's funeral :) glad you enjoyed the end. Thanks for reading and reviewing Tracy. I am glad you gave it a shot.
Date: 10/17/11 09:47 am Title: Epilogue
I knew you weren't going to kill Kev and had a feeling the funeral was for her mum, so glad I guessed right! I somehow don't think it's the end of Nick, but maybe it really is.
Well done Lore, I really enjoyed this story and look forward to more of your work in the near future :)
Author's Response: Aww I didn't hide it well? Lol who knows woth Nick...someone had to actually die didn't they? Lol thanks for reading and all your reviews I am glad you enjoyed. ;)
Date: 10/17/11 05:43 am Title: Epilogue
Oh lord I sense a sequal...I hope there is one. I'm not too convinced Nick is dead. He's the villian. lol. Then Steph got away too, stealthy suckers. YAY I'm so glad Kevin was ok, I knew you didn't have the heart to kill him...all the way. haha
Great story Lore. I totally fell in love with it and of course MY KEVIN!!! i shall miss them. yay on finishing.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review Erika! Thanks for giving my story a shot and falling in love with it. Steph was stealthy.. Nick got shot, not so stealth like. :) Thanks again! :-D
