Date: 09/18/17 11:58 am Title: Chapter 4 - First Mission..... Part 1
Oh that girl's poor mother. Four years not knowing must be unbearable.
Another great chapter
Date: 06/17/13 05:22 pm Title: Chapter 4 - First Mission..... Part 1
Oh man, what a start for a first mission! A fan! lol And an Howie girl!
I likw how it goes from funny things to serious stuff naturally. I'm not a fan of stories told in first person but, for this kind of story, it suits perfectly.
Author's Response: I like writing in third person POV but I think this story is better with first person. Thank you!
Date: 06/05/12 11:59 am Title: Chapter 4 - First Mission..... Part 1
Hmm, interesting. I wonder what it was about age 25 that triggered all this! Also, aside from a couple little things, you'd never know that English was not your first language! It's really great Ritz!
Author's Response: Awww, thank you so much, Julilly. :)
Date: 01/31/12 01:36 pm Title: Chapter 4 - First Mission..... Part 1
Ooo how creepy for his first experience with this! A fan! Awesome job. Can't wait to read more. :)
Author's Response: Aww Thank you! :)
Date: 10/22/11 10:55 am Title: Chapter 4 - First Mission..... Part 1
Okay, I just gotta say, I LOL at Nick being sure that the women preferred his smile over Howard's wink! LMAO!! That's sucha Nick thing to say! Hahahaha. I really enjoy how you wrote this girl... started off as if she were just another fan watching the show, and then she was in shock when Nick was staring at her and started giving her attention.
Then you threw this curveball at us with the fan suddenly disappearing and reappearing backstage, letting Nick know that she did happen to be a fan of theirs, but was also seeking his help. I gotta admit, I kinda freaked out with the ending of her suddenly looking dead, but you did a great job setting up this chapter!
Author's Response: LOL I seriously believe that at one point in the past seventeen years, it crossed Nick's mind that we loved his smile over Howie's wink. LOL. I think really hard how to show Nick's ability though it was already stated in the chapter 1 what was Nick's gift. It took me hours to find a place where Black and blue and Never gone tour was held on the same place, so I could put Patty in. And I'm happy to know that you liked how I presented it! and we both know how hard headed Nickolas is, so he won't believe Patty if she won't show it to him. LOL
Date: 09/24/11 12:39 am Title: Chapter 4 - First Mission..... Part 1
You know, Nick deserves that scare for playing with Abby's emotions. Oh wait...wrong story. lol. This chapter was really cool and I like how (if I didn't already kinda know his ability) I wouldn't have known she was until the zombie face. You are doing a great job Ritz. *thumbs up*
Author's Response: LMAO! but hey I think so too.... Nick definitely deserves that for playing with Abby's emotions. LOL oh my goodness, dear, I can't stop laughing..... Thank you for the reviews!
Date: 09/23/11 07:15 am Title: Chapter 4 - First Mission..... Part 1
Ok...so It's like midnight and I was about to read this chapter, but um...yeah I'm scurred. Don't laugh. I will read it tomorrow morning. :)
Author's Response: Ok, I won't laugh. Thanks for taking time to let me know you're reading this.... :)
Date: 09/19/11 08:50 pm Title: Chapter 4 - First Mission..... Part 1
Just trying to catch up on some reading. Sorry i'm a chapter behind. I loved the description of what she looked like after telling Nick she was dead. Totally freaky! Great job! :O)
Author's Response: aww Thank you, Mare. I'm glad you are still catching up... your review always put a big smile on my face. lol
Date: 09/12/11 03:58 pm Title: Chapter 4 - First Mission..... Part 1
oh my gosh!! she turned scary on him! Did she do it to prove she was dead or is there a darker reason! Oh I can't wait to see where this mission goes.
Author's Response: I guess just to prove that she was already dead, and I hope Nick believed her already. Thank you for still reading this, Lore. I am giving my best on this story and your reviews means so much. Thanks! :)
Date: 09/12/11 01:00 pm Title: Chapter 4 - First Mission..... Part 1
I really enjoyed that chapter Ritz. When she made the face at him, it reminded me a little of the film Beetlejuice, lol. I can just imagine him putting on the charm for the fans, and we all love it!
Author's Response: Thank you, steph. We all love the Carter Charm.... lol
