Reviewer: Mare Signed [Report This]
Date: 07/09/14 10:01 am Title: Chapter 8

I really loved how you described something as simple as sunburn. It must be scary to someone who had never experienced anything like that before. They are very much like babies in that way, being reborn. Very creative and clever ladies.

Steph, I am assuming you wrote this chapter? Just an FYI your chapter labels are off from what you said in the thread. Meaning it says Lore wrote this one, you wrote the next one, etc...I mentioned it in the thread but I'm not sure how much you check that. Not that it really matters who wrote what outside of this challenge, but it might mess up other people who are leaving reviews, talking to the wrong person per chapter. If this is incorrect, than you have been responding to Lore's reviews and not your own. lol either way you have a very confused Mare on your hands so I'm going to continue leaving feedback on these chapters that are labeled Lore thinking it's you unless I'm told otherwise,but since you are only responding to your chapters and it looks like Lore isn't responding at all I might just start reviewing every other chapter only, so again, let me know, okay?.

As someone who doesn't really read a lot of AU, it's hard to grasp someone like Howie being a bad guy and most likely someone like Brian or Kevin being the incredibly bad guy just because it seems so out of character which I guess is the point of AU. I mean either Kevin or Brian could fit the luminary (More so Brian in my eyes) because He seems to know it all lol but yes, that's going to be hard for me to fully embrace. I am trying though and that's just a me thing. The story itself is rock solid so far. I just think I need to tackle it more as an OF and less as a BSB one.

Author's Response: Yes I suppose in a way they are like babies as everything is new to them on the outside and they're very unprepared for it. I think we probably confused people with the chapters because we alternate but post each others chapters, so like with chapter 1, Lore wrote it but I posted it. It's because we send each other our chapter and then the person proof reading posts. It just seemed easier that way. This is definitely AU and no sign of them breaking out into BSB songs lol, but I'm glad you're giving it a chance :)