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Reviewer: Mare Signed [Report This]
Date: 07/11/14 09:24 am Title: Chapter 10

Before I review this chapter I wanted to just go back and respond to what Lore said at the end of the last chapter. As far as the Lumianry having a vehicle, that completely didn't come across while reading that chapter which is why I was confused with how quickly the guards got to Nick so fast without explanation. The reason I didn't think there would be a car is because they all seemed so sensitive to their surroundings, you would think the sound of a vehicle would have made them notice something was going on. Whether they knew what that sounded like or not. I felt like there was some kind of hole right there since it had been made such a big deal that they were already far enough away that they had stopped beeping. You might want to include a scene where the Luminary is driving to his location to explain why he got there so fast and how the guards were able to find them since they aren't beeping at all anymore. Just a thought.

okay, now onto this chapter. I'm glad to see Nick wasn't caught. I do have another question though, like if the rebels have never really made it out how do they know who or what they are fighting for? And I'm still unclear as to why these rebels were formed, how they manage to meet and talk about what to do and where they are going etc...

Sorry about all the questions but just wanted you to get this from the perspective of someone who might not read a lot of sci-fi. Just that going on to chapter 11, I thought we would know more by now.

I really did like your action sequence in this chapter. Just Nick thinking he'd been shot and he was a soulless body hanging around. Nicely done!

Author's Response: Hi Mare, I'm really going to have to re-read the story before I can answer properly as I can't remember what happens with the rebels lol. I think we explain it but I can't be sure as it's been a while.

Reviewer: DelphinaCarter Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/10/12 09:30 pm Title: Chapter 10

Something tells me they shouldn't trust Evan. Just because he lies to the luminary doesn't mean he won't lie to them to save his ass. I have a feeling he's crossing them. Great chapter ladies!

Author's Response:

Hmm, it's hard to know who to trust isn't it?  Thanks for reading and reviewing Tracy, so glad you're still enjoying it :)

Reviewer: Tri Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/09/12 10:00 pm Title: Chapter 10

Oh wow... I'm glad that they got out of that situation, but I'm still so worried for them... What if he's just lying so they can make them do the dirty work, find a place to settle outside of Endwise, and then kill them for rebelling? Haha, I don't know... Just worried about what the possibilities could be and I'm not sure whether we can completely trust Emma and now Evan. Can't wait for more! Good chapter. :)

Author's Response:

Thanks Tri, we shall see, hehehe.  Glad you enjoyed the chapter :)