Date: 07/17/14 09:22 am Title: Chapter 16
Aww, I'm not sure if I'm supposed to know who Mary is. I'm thinking she's the equivalent to those expendable Star Trek characters? The ones in the red shirts or something like that. I'm not a Star Trek fan but I do recall stories of characters wearing a certain colored shirt were pretty much only created to die. LOL Anyway...I'm sad to see she didn't survive. Even though you didn't mention what happened to the baby, I'm assuming it didn't make it either. It was a good way to show how they do need the technology that Endwise provided for everyone and would be a good selling point for Emma.
So is Kristen pregnant? Because that's the only thing that confused me in this chapter. Is she five months pregnant now or was Kevin talking about when he first got there?
Author's Response: I'm not sure who she is either lol, I need to re-read the story but have been away for a couple of weeks with no internet. I'll get back to you on the Kristen thing too as I can't remember that either. I'm not much use am I lol
Date: 06/26/12 12:21 am Title: Chapter 16
Really enjoyed the new chapter! I'm really like reading these everyday life experiences that they have no idea about. For example them not understanding the risk in childbirth. Really interesting to read their point of view.
Looking forward to reading more and seeing how the meeting with the mayor goes.
Sorry I just noticed this review! Yes, it is interesting that they don't know a lot about life, they've led a very sheltered existence in Endwise. Thanks for reading and reviewing :)
Date: 06/25/12 05:17 pm Title: Chapter 16
Oh eesh that's crazy! You're doing such a great job of showing situations that Nick and AJ wouldn't be accustomed to. It's so interesting! I can't wait for more... I'm sort of wondering if they're going to think life outside of Endwise is too tough... Update soon!!
It's definitely not the paradise they thought it would be! Thanks for reading Tri :)