Date: 06/29/14 10:04 am Title: :: Epilogue ::
Aww nice happy ending to your story and in real life as well! It's been great getting to know you through this. :O)
Author's Response: Thanks for reading Mare even though i know there were mistakes and all of that ;)
Date: 06/29/14 10:02 am Title: :: Twenty Six ::
I was confused at first before I realized you just jumped ahead in time. It's early lol Nice that they had a healthy little boy this time around. I'm off to read your very last chapter. :O)
Author's Response: To be honest i didnt know how else to keep it going without being repative cause i knew what i wanted to havr in the sequel. It was hard lol and i didnt mean to confuse lol.
Date: 06/28/14 10:05 am Title: :: Twenty Five ::
Wow, Nick is awesome and so understanding. The fact he organized it so the guys could be at the beach was a nice thing and of course Brian performing the ceremony lol
I find it a little unsettling how they both left their newborn with the worst mother on the planet,but hopefully they'll cut the festivities short and go back home.
Author's Response: I wad watching Friends and i was like i totally need to have Brian do this like what Joey did for Phoebe, i know Jane is like the worst parent ever i dont think i really took it into consideration i guess lol cause i tried to base her off my own mil and she isnt too terrible at times ;)
Date: 06/27/14 11:01 am Title: :: Twenty Four ::
It's nice how the police would so readily be willing to give Nick all the info. He could have been a mass murdered and wanted to kill this woman for all they knew. LOL Gotta love the police.
Author's Response: Lol i based this off pur own police force...our neighbors are terrible people and no matter how much we call and complain...they are just like whatever...they could kill someone and then defend them.
Date: 06/26/14 11:03 am Title: :: Twenty Three ::
Yikes, Rayna. Kind of not the most responsible thing, just leaving your kids for a week without telling anyone where you're going. I know you are depressed and all but yeah...if I were Nick that would make me second guess my relationship. Hopefully she'll come to her senses sooner than later.
your ex sounds like a real piece of work! I'm glad that part of your life is over with. Seems like your husband is a great guy:O) I'm glad you found him.Does he have a single brother by any chance? LOL
Author's Response: I added that part in there cause my mom did that to us kids we were older of course but she left a note saying to take care of her cat and off she went for a week. Never knew where she went or why either. As for Art having a single brother not anymore lol. All brothers are now taken and and he has four lol
Date: 06/25/14 11:50 am Title: :: Twenty Two ::
Yikes! Not sure if being admitted into a mental facility would help in her fight for custody of the kids. I can understand why she is so depressed though. I can't even imagine what losing a baby would feel like. Did your ex try to get custody of your kids?
Author's Response: Yes...he attempted it...but failed miserably when he realized that Art made enough money that couldnt compare to him. Not to mention he messed up and is now sitting in a jail cell. But i myself have been depressed and i was in a bad state at which it wasnt pretty. My mil went to a facility to make her feel better which is why i added this in there.
Date: 06/24/14 12:33 pm Title: :: Twenty One ::
Aww that was very sad.
Author's Response: I thought it was very important to add this chapter in there and when i first heard this song i thought it was perfect for this chapter. It was still another hard chapter to write.
Date: 06/23/14 10:29 am Title: :: Twenty::
Aww, very sad chapter. I'm also sorry about your miscarriage. I'm glad that Nick made it there in time to say goodbye.
Author's Response: Yeah it was hard to write. I cried while writing it/ typing it as well.
Date: 06/22/14 10:09 am Title: :: Nineteen::
So then this chapter answers the question from the previous one. It's the earlier chapters you need to change then. Did this twin scare happen to you in real life? Birthing twins is always such a tricky thing. One of my friends just gave bith to twins earlier this year and one of them had all kinds of complications and needed open heart surgery almost immediately after he was born. Thankfully he's doing fine now but for a really long time it was touch and go.
I liked the pace of this chapter and the fact that there was that element of fear of the unknown.
Author's Response: I have miscarried two babies early in pregnancy but i thought adding it in there would create a little depth to the story cause when i started writing it i had this whole series planned out in my head and when the sequel to this story is done i alrdy have the next sequel lined out. But Art and i have not been able to have a child of our own but by adding it in there i guess made me feel we got too since this story was so personal.
Date: 06/21/14 10:55 am Title: :: Eighteen::
I'm kind of glad that Jane was giving Rayna such a hard time so this way she knows to just listen to Nick next time around. I mean he's the one that has had to endure that horrible woman for his entire life! It was nice seeing her thrown out though!
You did it again as far as the baby. The only time you have mentioned twins was the scene at the doctors office. Every other time it's just been a little girl so you might want to either consider going back and changing these later chapters to include twins of changing that scene in the doctor's office because that's something that is going to really confuse people...like me lol
Author's Response: If i have sometime today i will read through and change what i can find...i wish i had put it on my flash drive but i didnt...but i can guarantee i will be doing some major editing and revising when i get back to missouri next week! And believe me i am itching to get home ;)
Date: 06/20/14 10:00 am Title: :: Seventeen ::
Yup, Jane's a jerk. Phew! Glad you didn't morph her into a good mother. That would have been harder to belive than if you had written that Nick was the one giving birth to these kids, sadly. Lol
Author's Response: Lmao....Jane is a lot like my mil in some aspects...i think there are more scenes coming up with her in it lol
Date: 06/19/14 10:31 am Title: :: Sixteen::
I'm really glad you decided to include the scene with the guys coming over for dinner. Of course leave it to Jane to ruin that. I was kind of surprised that Rayna took Jane's side as well since she is such a die hard fan, I would think she'd know how horrible Jane is and be just as leery to trust her. I hope she doesn't fully let her into their lives without having Jane prove herself first.
I have to ask, because I'm confused and might have missed something in a previous chapter, but I thought they were having twins? This chapter you mentioned a few times only one little girl and nothing about twins at all. Not sure if that was an oversight on your part, or I maybe missed something.
also another good tip when trying to figure out where one sentence begins and another ends, is to read it out loud. If you read one of your paragraphs and do not breath until you see a period, that's a good indication that you need to put some in there. As you read, when you find yourself naturally pausing, add punctuation there. Hopefully that will help you out when you re-edit this or edit anything else you write in the future. :O)
Author's Response: Probably a mistake on my part..i may have been doing my famous writing in the dark ;) But i always believed in giving people second chances...i wanted Rayna to be able to give her a full chance before she just completly judges her. And thanks for the tip i will have to remember this while writing ;)
Date: 06/18/14 10:33 am Title: :: Fifteen ::
You know what's funny? I have always said that Nick is going to have twin girls. Twins run in his family, even though they do tend to skip a generation. They both took the news very well. No,"OH MY GOD TWINS?" moment. I would have freaked out if I was him or if I was her. Especially if I was her and knew they'd eventually have to come out! LOL
As far as what you responded in my last review. I sometimes rush through things to. We get so anxious to get to a certain part of the story that we don't' realize we are skipping little details the readers probably want to know. Because these characters live in our heads, we already know what's going to happen but we have to remember no one else does.
Author's Response: Lol...yeah twins run in my family as well as Arts...but i thought the twins aspect would throw an extra curve ball in there ;) with this next story i am hoping to take my time while writing it....even with the sequel to this story i have taken my time with it. This particular story i think i was away from fan fiction for almost 5yrs..
Date: 06/17/14 12:14 pm Title: :: Fourteen ::
Aww, I have to admit I was kind of disappointed that this chapter wasn't about the get together they had. I was looking forward to reading that scene when the guys finally meet Rayna. I think you missed a great opportunity there. It was also hard for me to read Leighanne being helpful to anyone except Leighanne lol but the fact that Rayna is pregnant with Nick's baby is exciting. I really do think he's going to make a great daddy one day. Hopefully everything goes well for them and this pregnancy is smooth.
Author's Response: I had to re-read some chapters myself to familiarize myself cause frankly sometimes I will forget that I have written, I think I also kind of rushed myself when writing this I didn't take my time in doing so unfortunately. I was so focused on writing and other things that I didn't really capture a lot now that I am re-reading it myself.
Date: 06/16/14 10:19 am Title: :: Thirteen ::
Oh Nick! First you leave your promise ring just to have her find it and then you propose on the phone? LOL He's so romantic. It should be interesting. Me personally wants him to slow down.He's jumping in to this whole thing too fast, but we shall see how things turn out!
Author's Response: Lol....again....i am guilty lol...Art proposed over skype before we even met face to face...people thought we were crazy in a sense...but then when we met he proposed in person with a ring...lol most of this stuff actually happened just without Nick of course lol
