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Reviewer: KeepThisSecret Signed [Report This]
Date: 06/26/14 01:39 pm Title: Chapter 10

So, this chapter was a little bit longer. I appreciated some of the extra details that you added into this one (with the water fight and AJ's reactions to speaking with Michelle on the phone). I see in one of your replies that you acknowledged about the need to include a bit more detail and I'm glad that you've picked up on that.

Your dialogue is always nicely written and your style is easy to read. With the details that you included in this chapter, the whole scene flowed quite well. :)

Also, I'm glad that the AJ/Kat relationship appeared to be progressing in the right direction ... at least for now.

Author's Response: I'm definitely trying to work on giving more details. I think I've gotten better at it and you'll have to let me know! Thank you for the compliment on the dialogue, it's usually the easiest part for me. Hope you like where they're headed.

Reviewer: Sapphire Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/29/13 10:42 pm Title: Chapter 10

Aw so glad they are getting along now. Great chapters! Can't wait for more.



Author's Response:

Thanks Sapphire, I'm glad you're enjoying it!