You posted it! Yay! I enjoyed this revised version of the first chapter - I liked the scene you added ahead of what you had sent me to read. It gives the whole story a creepier, more ominous vibe right off the bat, which is what you want in a suspense! I'm wondering who the guy Nick saw or thought he saw outside was. I'm guessing Andrew, because of the ring and the fact that he seemed to think he might be a ghost LOL. I hope this means you're having good luck with this story! Great start, and I'm looking forward to reading more soon! :)

Author's Response:

Well I'm not having much luck writing anything else!  I figured I may as well go ahead and start posting this one.  I'm glad you liked the beginning I ended up going with.  I rewrote it couple times before I decided to just go with it!  I have just a few chapters written so far, but it's basically already outlined. so we'll see how it goes!  I'm hoping I can actually pull this off!