Date: 08/12/13 11:04 pm Title: Chapter 6
So now Howie's going to get eaten by wolves, too? Or is this the big grizzly bear?
Author's Response: You know, there just might be some kind of wolves take over the world conspiracy going on, perhaps. Besides why should Kevin be the only one to be eaten? I mean the woods are pretty big there's plenty of room for wolves to roam around. LOL If that even is a wolf and not just Howie's imagination. :OP
Date: 08/12/13 01:52 pm Title: Chapter 5
Yikes! Kevin being attacked by wolves certainly wasn't a scenario I was imagining here! Nice element of surprise there! That's what I think makes you such a great suspense writer. I can see myself writing something similar to this chapter, but then stopping with Kevin being stranded and hurt-- not facing the possibility of being attacked by wolves!
Author's Response: Well, sometimes you just need wolves, you know? Because things weren't quite dire enough lol Thanks, Emily!!
Date: 08/12/13 08:03 am Title: Chapter 5
Oh, wow, a Brian Chapter *me very happy*
I love your description of his thoughts, how he kept going from being worried about everyone and angry at the same time because he's stuck and he can't do anything.
Wolves. Wow. I bet that Kevin can scare them only with the power of the giant eyebrows. U.U
Amazing chapter!
Author's Response:
Yup, if Kevin ever needed his magical brows to help him out, now would be the time! Thanks, I was telling Julie under you lol I figure all those feelings would pop up when stuck like that. I'm sure Brian doesn't like to feel helpless! Thanks, Cinzia!
Date: 08/12/13 05:11 am Title: Chapter 5
Wolves!!! YES! LMAO! Who needs a bear attack when you've got wolves in the woods?! Kevin better find a way to get himself into that van so he's not a sitting duck when the wolf pack comes LOL. I loved Brian's line of thinking in this chapter, how it kept alternating between anger and sadness/worry/fear, thinking first that Nick and Howie were just dicking around and then that one or both of them must be dead. That's totally how anyone would react in that situation, when all you have is time to think. Your thoughts just run away with you. I loved the AJ parts, too, especially when he said he just wanted to kiss his daughter, and that got to Brian. :( Please include a scene in which a crippled Kevin has to fight off wolves! Don't just tease us; make it happen! LOL :)
Author's Response:
Wolves are so much better than one boring bear! LOL I tried to put myself in Brian's situation and I don't think I could handle being stuck in one pisition for that long without my brain going a mile a minute and being mad at everyone around me while worrying about them all at the same time. I really wonder why I make AJ cuss as much as I do. Just like Nick with his eye rolls, I don't picture AJ being that much of a potty mouth, even though I have heard him be every time we've met. All two times! LOL Thanks again, Julie!
Date: 08/12/13 05:03 am Title: Chapter 4
Oh god LOL. I love Tim! He might end up being my favorite original character in a fanfic ever LOL. He is so delightfully creepy and crazy, but not in a cliched crazy way (I laughed out loud so hard at the line about having sex with gophers, btw!). I like that you took the time to give a physical description because it wasn't how I was picturing him, but it makes him more interesting, the fact that he looks and sounds fairly normal when he talks, until you think about what he's actually saying. So creepy!! I like how this chapter kind of flashed back and forth between the scene with Tim and Nick driving to the store and the scene of Tim initially taking Howie and Nick to the cabin so we could see how all that played out. Poor Nick... I'm thinking he's hurt worse than anyone realizes, maybe internal injuries? He might need more than aspirin, which will put Tim in an interesting predicament. God, I love this!
Author's Response:
Oh my GOD! That is like the biggest compliment EVER! That you think Tim is tbe best original character ever because of his creepy and craziness! Thank you SO much for saying that And woot! About the gopher line. You know I had to get some kind of gopher reference in there somewhere! I am usually not big on describing my people (it's always been a weakness of mine) but He needed to be really described because of how nice and normal he looked. The last thing I wanted him to be besides the sterotypical bad guy, was to look like one. The outdoors woodsman who wears jeans and flannel shirts and has the same beard as AJ! Or basically, AJ wearing flannel LMAO And about Nick hrm... could be! "Dont Wanna Lose You Now..." ;O) Thanks for taking the time to read, Julie. I know you're in full fledged school mode so I appreciate it!
Date: 08/12/13 04:53 am Title: Chapter 3
I love the way you kept me guessing about Kevin and Nick until the end of this chapter. You made it seem like either one of them could have been the one who went with Howie or the "broken" one who stayed behind. Now everything is finally clear. Poor Kevin - it's fun to take him out of commission like this! You did a great job showing his feelings of guilt over what happened... especially in that moment when he saw Howie holding Nick's head in his lap and thought he was dead. Wow. I loved the bromantic moment between them at the end of the chapter. No one writes Kick better than you!
Author's Response:
Thanks! It was really hard when writing this, to NOT have it just be Kevin and Nick together the entire time. YOu have no idea how many times I changed up who I wanted where in this story before I went with the pairings I did. So when Kevin and Nick are anywhere in the vinicinity of each other, I have to give them moments! LOL I was telling Tracy that it's funny in the end both of our crashes were because of Kevin and his need to feel like a control freak!
Date: 08/12/13 03:10 am Title: Chapter 4
Dude is messed up, and when they get back and he finds Howie gone... Oh shit, Nick's going to be in trouble. I love that even though Nick is so obviously freaked out, he's still worried about the others first. There's this sudden softer side of him that you've written (Wanting to see Lauren again, worried about the boys, crying). Based on how he's changed personally in the last couple years, the change you've written is pretty spot on to how I imagine he might react in this situation versus when he was younger. If that makes sense. lol
Author's Response: I'm so glad you picked up on that because I really tried to make a conscious effort to grow him up and let all these positive changes he's been through reflect his thoughts and actions. So, yay to that! It's weird you were here reviewing chapter 4 as I was posting chapter 5. LOL Thanks, Sam!
Date: 08/12/13 02:18 am Title: Chapter 4
Tim is so creepy! I love him. Yeah I have issues lol. But his disconnect from reality is so realistic in how you portray him. Poor Nick and Howie, I really enjoy their bond too so I'm glad you had the two of them taken together. :)
Author's Response:
Thanks LOL I'm glad you're loving Tim. I was actually in the middle of writing another creepy Tim scene when I got this review email. You don't know how hard it was for me to NOt have to be Kevin and Nick, but like you, I do enjoy me some Nick and Howie love as well. Thanks, Rose!
Date: 08/12/13 12:06 am Title: Chapter 4
ooh wow....Tim sounds kinda psycho now. Poor Nick and Howie!
Author's Response:
Yup, he's kind of nutso bonkrs! LOL Thanks!! :O)
Date: 08/11/13 08:35 pm Title: Chapter 4
Oh god, he's like jekyll and hyde a bit isn't he? I hope he does phone for help and the police track him down to his creepy little cabin! How can he expect them to forget their lives and be happy with him? Nutter!
Great chapter Mare, really loving this story :)
Author's Response:
Yes, he's kind of an all over the place looney tune! Thanks, Steph! I'm glad you're enjoying it! :O)
Date: 08/11/13 06:29 pm Title: Chapter 4
Oh boy! That guy has completely lost touch with reality. I like the part about AJ looking like he belonged in that cabin!
Author's Response:
hehehe thanks! Sad, but true! I wish he would shave that thing! LOL
Date: 08/11/13 06:24 pm Title: Chapter 3
Poor Kevin! I'm glad AJ and Brian are alive even if they're stuck. I hope they stay that way!
Author's Response:
We shall see! ;O) lol I guess it depends on how well you know me!
Date: 08/11/13 06:19 pm Title: Chapter 2
I love that Howie kept pushing himself till he got loose and to hear the guys act like brothers. Great chapter!
Author's Response:
It's always fun to put Howie into a hero role. He usually gets totally ignored! LOL Poor Howie! Thanks, Kyrie!
Date: 08/11/13 04:22 pm Title: Chapter 1
Mare,
Glad you got your mojo back! You have this uncanny ability in creating creepy villiams which appear to be normal.(Trish from the Bible trilogy and Ariana in "Scars") I'm still unsure of my feelings about Tim.....granted, he did kidnap Howie and Nick, but his isolation has warped him.
His remark about Howie looking out for Nick I thought was ironic considering baby bro wanted to come with Howie to look out for him and to get help for the others. (Maybe one day Nick will finally accept that he will always be the baby and the others will always see him at a certain age....atleast, that's what my baby sister says! I'm 16 years older than she is and she's right to a certain extent.)
Like the cliffie at the end....will he or won't he send help for the others? Again, great start Mare. I look forward to reading more. However, my reviews will be a little erratic....we return to school this week!
Pammy
Author's Response:
Thanks, Pammy! I wish I had the spark to start this story at the beginning of the summer and not the end lol I think you hit the nail right on the head about Nick and how the other's percieve him as opposed to maybe how he sees himself, although I do think he enjoys his role as the baby quite a bit. LOL And thanks for the compliments about my villians. I really try to make them human and not totally handle bar moustache bad guys. There is a reason they act the way they do and it's usually not entirely their fault.
Good luck with the start of school and just read when you can. I'm doing things different and pretty much posting a chapter a day so it'll be here waiting for you. Nice to see you reading my stuff again! :O)
Date: 08/10/13 09:36 pm Title: Chapter 4
Ok. Tim is really creepy. Way creepy. Too much creepy. But... I kinda like him. LOL
Mh... I'm kinda scared for those three still left in the car.
Amazing chapter!
Author's Response:
thanks, Cinzia! We'll be getting to those three next! :O) lol
