Date: 08/25/13 01:07 pm Title: Chapter Thirteen
I didn't think about Margo possibly not being real!I hope that she is real and she gets herself back together but that would leave Nick by himself and that kind of scares me.She's the reason he has gotten as far as he has and without her,I don't know if he will make it.But at least Brian has an idea that might give Nick a little more time to figure things out!So there is still hope!I love this story so much and I can't wait for more!
Date: 08/25/13 11:30 am Title: Chapter Thirteen
looophole! can't believe they found her listed. nick is so cute getting excited about faling in love with a smart girl :)
Date: 08/25/13 08:31 am Title: Chapter Twelve
O_O Dude! No! Jane, don't you pull that plug! Nooooo.
I love the tidbits between Nick and Margo. Aw, he thinks she's pretty. I'm glad he's not alone in pause world... coma world? :)
You write Nick very well, he's kind of that got that "dumb blond" thing going on. No offense to blondes.... I'm sporting the blond hair too. lol. It's very endearing.
I hope Brian doesn't give up hope on his best friend. Keep the fight strong! haha
Will be looking forward to your next update. As always.
Date: 08/24/13 08:42 pm Title: Chapter Twelve
Brain dead is a really strong term. Interested to see how/if you get Nick out of this one!
Date: 08/24/13 12:43 pm Title: Chapter Twelve
aaww that was so sweet. I hope he really means it.
Date: 08/24/13 11:47 am Title: Chapter Twelve
LOL!I LOVED the part where Nick just blurted out,"You're Pretty." I could so see him doing that to someone lol.I really hope that he and Margo can both find their way back to the real world!Anyway,Great Chapter!Can't wait for more!
Date: 08/24/13 09:08 am Title: Chapter One
Hi Penji,
This is an amazingly original story. I just read all 11 chapters and love it. I was so close to tears a few times. They both feel guilt I just hope Nick comes back, I had no clue they broke up!! Great story. Please update soon!
Rosalie
Date: 08/24/13 05:31 am Title: Chapter Eleven
I feel terrible for Brian.He feels so much guilt but Kevin is right,He shouldn't blame himself.I really hope that Nick and Margo can figure out how to get Nick "Unpaused" before something bad happens and he is stuck forever.If he does get himself out of this though,I am worried about what will happen to Margo if he does.Anyway,Great chapter!Can't wait for more!
Date: 08/24/13 04:44 am Title: Chapter Eleven
Love the chapter with Kevin & Brian. You did a great job of portraying how Kevin would be in this situation as level headed and logical with facts that there wasn't much hope left for Nick to come back. The journal was a great added touch. Looking forward to the next update.
Date: 08/24/13 01:23 am Title: Chapter Eleven
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I don't know why but every Brian's chapter is like a box of tissues used.
Date: 08/24/13 12:54 am Title: Chapter Ten
ooohh....things have gotten more interesting. Looking forward to the next chapter!
Date: 08/23/13 09:19 pm Title: Chapter Ten
Good thing Nick is with someone who thinks of things that he doesn't lol Otherwise I don't think he would have even gotten this far.Anyway,Great chapters!Can't wait for more!
Author's Response: haha Seriously! poor Nick, he'd be so lost on his own. It's a good thing he's cute.
Date: 08/23/13 09:10 pm Title: Chapter Nine
Well,At least Brian is starting to understand Nick's side of everything and he wants to fix it.I hope he gets the chance!Great Chapter!On to the next one!
Date: 08/23/13 06:55 pm Title: Chapter Ten
When I red the first couple of chapters, I was like: hmm I don't know if I like this story but it all makes sense now ;) Love it!Don't let Nick die though, for real :P
Author's Response: lol Glad I was able to keep you interested enough to get past those first few chapters! ;)
Date: 08/23/13 11:13 am Title: Chapter Nine
I hope when they get back she doesn't suddenly age or something cause she got stuck a crazy number of years ago!
