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Reviewer: Nijntje Signed [Report This]
Date: 11/28/13 12:03 am Title: Chapter Twenty-Three / 2013

I wonder what is on Nick's mind.. great chapter as usual!

Reviewer: emily_michele Signed [Report This]
Date: 11/27/13 03:43 am Title: Chapter Twenty-Three / 2013

To comment a little on the writing itself, I love your use of metaphors, and the ones in this chapter are perfect examples. "...like a disturbed hive of bees, stinging my senses and making my hands sweat and shake as I stared at him laying there in bed" and "I felt like a gutted fish, like Lauren had reached down my throat and pulled out all my insides and thrown them away and now I was just all hollow and smelly in there" Even though they may on the surface seem a little absurd (and humorous!), they don't seem forced, and describe the situations perfectly.

Author's Response: Thank you for the comment! I tend to use a lot of crazy metaphors when I talk in everyday language and I think that's why I weave them throughout stories the way I do. Sometimes it's just not enough to say things like "I feel sad" or whatever - sometimes, you gotta whip out the gutted fish and really paint a word picture of the feeling. I try to make Nick the one most likely to do this in my stories, and that's mainly because of the way I write him, I try to give him this really goofy, kinda forgetful "blonde" type personality -- and I guess he's closest to how I really am in real life when I write these stories, to be honest -- and the metaphors just fall out of his personality type the easiest. I'm glad that you enjoy them. :)

Reviewer: KeepThisSecret Signed [Report This]
Date: 11/26/13 02:07 pm Title: Chapter Twenty-Three / 2013

How many Christmas decorations can two Backstreet Boys purchase at Walmart?? My guess is the whole damn store!!

Author's Response: Haha, at least they'll keep the stockers busy once they've cleared the shelves off!

Reviewer: Yara Signed [Report This]
Date: 11/26/13 11:34 am Title: Chapter Twenty-Three / 2013

Jum, what could he possibly need at walmart? Cant wait for more. Great chapter.

Author's Response: Read on and find out ;)

Reviewer: Kyrie Signed [Report This]
Date: 11/26/13 12:34 am Title: Chapter Twenty-Three / 2013

The hospital, a bar, a hotel.....Walmart? Didn't see that coming! Hope he's going back to Matty and Abbey!

Author's Response: Haha What you mean you DON'T go to Walmart after a break-up?! Isn't it just like Nick to do something unconventional/unexpected? Especially when he has Brian, his minion, with him?

Reviewer: Jujube Signed [Report This]
Date: 11/25/13 11:22 pm Title: Chapter Twenty-Three / 2013

aww poor Nick! I wonder what Nick is up to! Great Chapter!!

Author's Response: Always something up that boy's sleeve...

Reviewer: Nijntje Signed [Report This]
Date: 11/25/13 07:11 pm Title: Chapter Twenty-Three / 2013

I wonder what is on Nick's mind.. great chapter as usual!

Author's Response: Nick's mind is a dangerous place... LOL