Date: 11/28/13 02:13 pm Title: Chapter Twenty-Five / 2013... and a little glimpse at 1986
Those Elf on the Shelf things creep me out!! LOL. It seems as though Matty is quite taken with Jeraldo, and it was super sweet of Nick to go through all of that trouble. Although I wasn't feeling the whole Abbey/Nick relationship in the beginning, I am now definitely waiting for them to hook up! Let's go already!! :)
Date: 11/28/13 12:03 am Title: Chapter Twenty-Three / 2013
I wonder what is on Nick's mind.. great chapter as usual!
Date: 11/27/13 11:43 am Title: Chapter Twenty-Five / 2013... and a little glimpse at 1986
Great update. Loved Jeraldo. Cant wait for Mattys reaction in the morning.
Date: 11/27/13 03:49 am Title: Chapter Twenty-Four / 2013
We got our Elf on the Shelf out last night, and my 3-year old was really angry that he didn't get to touch him. He even went so far as to sneak out of his bed last night and get Peter (because the elf looks like Peter Pan, apparently) and hide him under his pillow. He totally didn't buy into the magic until Peter flew back from the North Pole and ended up tangled up in the pull cords hanging from the ceiling fan (since he was flying and all), then disappeared(thanks to my sneaky husband) during our bed time routine tonight. Now I think he's a believer.
Author's Response: OOOOOOOOOOOOOMG I love that. That is awesome. So funny that Jeraldo was chillin' on a fan - I hope he talked to Peter about how pesky those cords could be before he got up there. That is amazing! I've always wanted to have a kid around to do the Elf on the Shelf bit with. I even own one but I don't do the whole moving it around thing, of course, cos it's just me and my sister. But I really want to one day, LOL
Date: 11/27/13 03:43 am Title: Chapter Twenty-Three / 2013
To comment a little on the writing itself, I love your use of metaphors, and the ones in this chapter are perfect examples. "...like a disturbed hive of bees, stinging my senses and making my hands sweat and shake as I stared at him laying there in bed" and "I felt like a gutted fish, like Lauren had reached down my throat and pulled out all my insides and thrown them away and now I was just all hollow and smelly in there" Even though they may on the surface seem a little absurd (and humorous!), they don't seem forced, and describe the situations perfectly.
Author's Response: Thank you for the comment! I tend to use a lot of crazy metaphors when I talk in everyday language and I think that's why I weave them throughout stories the way I do. Sometimes it's just not enough to say things like "I feel sad" or whatever - sometimes, you gotta whip out the gutted fish and really paint a word picture of the feeling. I try to make Nick the one most likely to do this in my stories, and that's mainly because of the way I write him, I try to give him this really goofy, kinda forgetful "blonde" type personality -- and I guess he's closest to how I really am in real life when I write these stories, to be honest -- and the metaphors just fall out of his personality type the easiest. I'm glad that you enjoy them. :)
Date: 11/27/13 12:52 am Title: Chapter Twenty-Five / 2013... and a little glimpse at 1986
Do not go back to Lauren - be with Abbey!
Date: 11/27/13 12:48 am Title: Chapter Twenty-Four / 2013
I absolutely love Nick! That was probably the sweetest thing anyone has done for Matty and Abbey! He's awesome, loved this chapter!
Author's Response: Glad you loved it! I think this is one of the funner Nick's I've written in a long time, despite all his drama he's been a pretty happy Nick, haha.
Date: 11/26/13 05:38 pm Title: Chapter Twenty-Four / 2013
Wonderful!
Author's Response: Thank ya!
Date: 11/26/13 05:03 pm Title: Chapter Twenty-Four / 2013
Awwww Nick did such an amazing thing!! Matty is so excited!! Great update!!
Author's Response: Somewhere, fictional Nick's ego just grew like the Grinch's heart... LOL
Date: 11/26/13 02:07 pm Title: Chapter Twenty-Three / 2013
How many Christmas decorations can two Backstreet Boys purchase at Walmart?? My guess is the whole damn store!!
Author's Response: Haha, at least they'll keep the stockers busy once they've cleared the shelves off!
Date: 11/26/13 11:34 am Title: Chapter Twenty-Three / 2013
Jum, what could he possibly need at walmart? Cant wait for more. Great chapter.
Author's Response: Read on and find out ;)
Date: 11/26/13 12:34 am Title: Chapter Twenty-Three / 2013
The hospital, a bar, a hotel.....Walmart? Didn't see that coming! Hope he's going back to Matty and Abbey!
Author's Response: Haha What you mean you DON'T go to Walmart after a break-up?! Isn't it just like Nick to do something unconventional/unexpected? Especially when he has Brian, his minion, with him?
Date: 11/25/13 11:22 pm Title: Chapter Twenty-Three / 2013
aww poor Nick! I wonder what Nick is up to! Great Chapter!!
Author's Response: Always something up that boy's sleeve...
Date: 11/25/13 07:11 pm Title: Chapter Twenty-Three / 2013
I wonder what is on Nick's mind.. great chapter as usual!
Author's Response: Nick's mind is a dangerous place... LOL
Date: 11/23/13 03:26 am Title: Chapter Twenty-Two / 2013... and a little 2012
Wonderful update. Im glad he comfrontef her and that she didnt deny it.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I thought about having her deny it, but their entire relationship was based on telling each other things and I think that when he confronted her she would've felt obligated to tell him the truth because of that foundation they had built. I don't think we've seen the last of Lauren yet in this story...
