Date: 08/06/14 01:33 am Title: Chapter 30: Nick
Snap out of it Nick! You all need to be watching out for each other not wallowing. The elderly couple part was cute but they need to figure out about Joey.
Author's Response: You were so harsh towards Nick! I'm actually kind of surprised. I was expecting him to get a bit more sympathy.
Date: 07/29/14 07:14 am Title: Chapter 30: Nick
Hm... so it seems Tony isn't in on it. Maybe. He could be faking. I thought he was when he started smiling about the car. We'll see. I loved Nick's reaction at the beginning, when he just started crying and thinking about giving up. Honestly, that would probably be me in a situation like this LOL. It felt realistic to me. It was sweet how Brian comforted him, the scent of Old Spice. I know I've said it so many times before, but I just love the way you write the guys together. Even though this is a great suspense, I really love the bromance.
Author's Response: It's nice to know that you are still appreciating the guys' relationships. Sometimes I struggle to figure out whether or not they are coming across properly. FYI, I would have balled my eyes out a long time ago and hidden in a closet. I don't do scary/stressful situations very well.
Date: 07/29/14 01:39 am Title: Chapter 30: Nick
At least Tony "seems" to be on the up and up so far. I'm wondering just how they got away from him though. I'm suspicious of everybody now LOL.
Author's Response: Excellent! I want you to be suspicious of everyone at this point!
Date: 06/17/14 08:45 pm Title: Chapter 30: Nick
So now I need to know is Tony playing dumb and involved with this or is Joey the only bad guy on the team. Plus are there any dirty cops involved?
Author's Response: So many good questions! You will have to keep reading to find out. The answers will all be revealed soon enough.
Date: 06/09/14 02:11 pm Title: Chapter 30: Nick
Yay frick and frack again.
Author's Response: You know it!! My favourite pair! (Next to Brian and AJ) :)
Date: 06/06/14 09:07 pm Title: Chapter 30: Nick
Aww, poor Nick. I'm really glad that you chose Nick to be so vulnerable in this chapter. He does seem like the type of guy who tends to have delayed reactions to things. And of course I was happy he laid into the bodyguard when he started laughing. That made ME mad lol I hope the guys realize Kevin & Howie are in trouble because lord knows they can't depend on Joey to figure it out!
Author's Response: Nick does always strike me as being a bit behind. I felt like it was time for him to realize the severity of the situation though. All of the other guys are freaked out and it was time for Nick to get on board. LOL
Date: 06/04/14 06:27 am Title: Chapter 30: Nick
Poor Nick! I can understand how it would only become real for him now. Despite the earlier threatening notes, the danger must have seemed remote to him since he hadn't experienced an initial shock of thinking his close friend was dead, as did the others.
Brian's role of comforting Nick in this chapter is a nice turnaround from the earlier scene where Nick has to hold and reassure him. I feel it's this newfound honesty and directness between them that allows Brian to deal with Nick's outburst and at the same time tell him something likely to upset him further. Nicely written!
Tony's reaction to the note and to Joey's not picking up (if that is indeed what happened) have me second-guessing my earlier assumption about both bodyguards being in on it. The slow-car story is plausible, and I was surprised that Tony (apparently) called the note in to the police without any prompting. Maybe there is yet hope!
Just one thing: sometimes I wonder, when there is a lack of specifics in your narration, whether it's because (a) it's not important to the story; (b) the chapter's narrator wasn't paying close enough attention; or (c) the resulting ambiguity is useful to mislead the reader or prompt our jumping to whatever conclusion you wish to encourage. Not that I expect an answer per se... I realize you are essentially writing mystery novel here and it's up to us, as readers, to do the sleuthing!
Can't wait to find out what's happening next. :)
Author's Response: You pose an interesting question. If I had to choose a response, I would probably go with option C. I don't really want things to come off as too predictable, but I don't want to lead you down the completely wrong path either. Another reason may simply be because I have forgotten and/or failed to realize that I need to include certain specifics. This is my first attempt at writing in the "suspense" genre and it's taking some getting used to. I really want to thank you for asking that question; it has really made me think about my writing and how my narrators are coming across. Thanks for the feedback!
Date: 06/03/14 03:33 am Title: Chapter 30: Nick
Oh boy!!! There ya go keeping me on my toes again!!! Cant wait to see what happens!!
Author's Response: I had to keep some mystery surrounding Tony ... I didn't want to reveal too much right away. Where's the fun in that?? LOL I'm glad that you are looking forward to more. I hope to have another chapter up sometime this week.
Date: 06/02/14 09:23 pm Title: Chapter 30: Nick
Ok... So either Tony isn't in on it or is playing Nick, Brian and a.j. Hmm. Not sure what to think about him at this moment. I kind of hope he's not in on it. But if he's not, he may bite the dust right? I do wonder if he's lying about the old couple. Hmmmmm, hmmmm some more. Hmmmms everywhere! You see what you do to me? Hahaha love it though
Author's Response: Tony, Tony, Tony, what are you up to? I'm glad that you are a bit confused about him at this point as that was my intent. You will find out his involvement or lack there of within the next few chapters. Until then, I will leave you with your thoughts. :P
