Date: 08/10/14 09:00 pm Title: Chapter 32: Howie
I loved your use of description in this chapter, especially with the setting. I could picture this abandoned industrial building with the cheap fluorescent lighting that doesn't quite get rid of the shadows. The cameras add a nice, creepy touch. I appreciate how Howie just allowed himself to be led in instead of trying to fight, even though he thought about it. I've said this before, but that would probably be me LOL. I'd be too afraid to try anything, knowing I probably wouldn't be able to get away anyway. Somehow I think Kevin is not going to be as content just to sit there and take it. We'll see.
Author's Response: Wow - you certainly have done a lot of reading since the last time that I logged on. I suppose that's what I get for going away for a few days. Hahaha! Anways, I'm looking forward to reading all of your reviews. I'm glad that you were able to picture the setting. My goal was to make it sound sufficiently creepy. LOL - You, me, and Howie would just let ourselves be led along to the gloomy basement. There's no way that I would try and fight back in that situation. I'm a wimp.
Date: 08/06/14 01:41 am Title: Chapter 32: Howie
Howie's right, you guys don't deserve this! I only hope that it gets better not worse!
Author's Response: I'm not gonna lie, things are probably going to get worse before they even have a chance of getting better.
Date: 07/29/14 01:45 am Title: Chapter 32: Howie
God they're FILMING it? That's fucked up. But in that delightfully twisted way LOL. You're creating some legitimately psychotic villains and it's awesome.
Author's Response: Of course they're filming it! Why not?? Hahaha!
Date: 06/17/14 08:54 pm Title: Chapter 32: Howie
I can hardly wait for more updates! This story is so good thanks for all the excellet writing
Author's Response: Awwww that last comment made me all warm and fuzzy inside. :) Another update is coming your way as soon as I finish writing this sentence.
Date: 06/15/14 05:06 am Title: Chapter 32: Howie
I think you did a great job of conveying the terror of the experience through Howie's reactions (or reflections, in his head) and his inability to offer any resistance to his captors.
I would have to agree with Howie that this is a bad situation--the fact that neither the villain nor her lackeys make any attempt to hide their identities or where they're going makes it certain they see this as a one-way trip for the Boys. At the same time, locking them up and leaving them to guess their fate seems to fit the police's profile in that she wants to make them suffer.
I liked how Kevin could be the strong one during the kidnapping, but Howie was the one to find words of reassurance once they were alone.
Can't wait for what's next! Nick, maybe? ;)
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the positive comments about Howie's terror (or internal sense of it anyways). :) You're right: their captor does not care one bit about showing her face. It can only mean bad things as far as the boys are concerned. I agree that Howie's assessment of them being in a "bad situation" is pretty fair.
Date: 06/15/14 12:08 am Title: Chapter 32: Howie
Aww, I know this is going to sound funny coming from me, especially since you read "Hope" but I hate when the guys are tied up and held prisoner. Not that I hate it as far as a story cliche or anything, but more like the idea of them being that helpless. When I read about Howie's hands being tied up I actually cringed. The two of them being so vulnerable makes me antsy! And I'm sure I wouldn't be helping the situation any because when Kevin was going on about being so dumb I was thinking, "Uh...yeah you were kind of dumb!" LOL curious to see what that TV screen is all about and if the other three will be getting a message.
Author's Response: It does sound a bit strange considering the fact that you almost had Nick buried alive in Hope :P, but I suppose part of the writing process is pushing ourselves to write things that we're not really comfortable with. The thought of the guys actually being in such a situation makes me cringe as well. While I am enjoying writing this story, I'm definitely having a hard time putting the guys in a "bad" situation. We'll see how I hold up as things move along. On a side note, Kevin was pretty dumb. The clue was literally right in front of his face! OI!
Date: 06/12/14 12:50 am Title: Chapter 32: Howie
Ok, I am definitely wracking my brain thinking of all the scenarios as to why the unsub has taken our boys. I fear for Howie and Kevin as they under a critical time period now. What's the max time? 24 or 48 hrs before its all downhill? Eh, anyways... Thanks for the update, I am looking forward to finding out the motives behind this kidnapping... Is it money? Its always about money, isn't it? Or at least seems that way. Haha. Just pure revenge? Maybe... I am excited to see though
Author's Response: I think the magic number may be 48 hours, but doesn't that only apply to children? I need to brush up on my detective knowledge. LOL I will leave you to keep questioning the motive behind the kidnapping. I don't want to give anything away just yet. :)
