Reviews For When We Collide
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Reviewer: GrunAugen Signed [Report This]
Date: 07/13/14 07:44 am Title: 7. Together

Aww, and here I thought they'd be all together by now... :(
I really liked your characterizations in this chapter, especially Kevin's, since you're writing mainly from his p.o.v. I think you conveyed well how his desire to be in control stems from sincere caring about everyone.
I can definitely see AJ's wandering off after being stuck at 'base camp' a couple chapters ago, and I'm glad the guys got some first aid supplies. Also good to know there will be some painkillers for Brian when he starts feeling less stubborn...
The mutual iodining was a good way to inject some humour into this chapter. It's good how you explained the beneficial role of the cold temperature and snow, and I suppose after about two hours since the crash they're not doing too badly, but I'm seriously wondering about how Brian's doing. Maybe the next chapter from his p.o.v. again?
I feel like it all depends on Nick, now--whether he managed to pass the bus after all before the collision or if he's somewhere behind them in a separate vehicle (ideally).
Hope to read more soon and great job with the writing!