Date: 09/30/14 11:41 pm Title: 14. Cradle
That was a really strong scene. I liked how you portray AJs struggle and Brian just slowly dying really. It's quite dramatic and so sad, so exactly the kind of stuff and story I like...
I'm always excited for the new chapter, cause I can't wait to see how it continues. What you do great is interactions between the characters, they seem sweet and are well written :)
Date: 09/30/14 04:42 pm Title: 14. Cradle
Oh, wow, I don't know who's going to be more traumatized by this whole thing: Brian (if he survives) or AJ. I'm so glad AJ manages to reject the lure of one last drink, and yay for rescue finally arriving!
Author's Response: thanks for reviewing!
AJ probably, I don't think Brian would remember half of it.
To the rescue!