Date: 02/13/15 09:38 am Title: Chapter Seven
Wow, this was one roller coaster of a chapter. I loved how Nick and Brian went from semi getting along, to an outright shouting match, to trying to save each other, and then working their way towards and understanding. The argument was pretty believeable in the way that it escalated from the most well-intentioned words into something really ugly. Nick's rescueing Brian was kind of wonderful--and the spork shrive comment perfectly summed up his conflicting feelings at that moment. I also enjoyed and appreciated your description from Brian's p.o.v. of the character of the bar they entered and how he felt so exposed and out of place.
I'm so glad you posted this and the next chapter close together. I don't think i could have handled the suspense of the last moment of this one if I'd had to wait. ;)
Author's Response: I feel like most arguments that happen between friends start from a seedling of misunderstanding and grow-grow-grow until they become this sort of monster. I think a big part of them getting into the conversations they did in the next chapter was born from Nick's realization that he cared about Brian enough to react so strongly to somebody trying to hurt him. He knew Brian would be out of place, that's why he chose that place, and yet when Brian's out-of-place-ness actually got him into shit, Nick stepped in quick. If that chapter had been reversed in POV, we would've found Nick standing a little ways off watching Brian and feeling bad for making him so uncomfortable in the first place. This scene was one of the ones that drove the whole storyline - Nick getting punched in a bar and Brian dragging him to a restroom to wake him up.
Date: 02/10/15 09:09 pm Title: Chapter Eight
I'm glad they talked. Still feel as if they may have a few things to sort out maybe but they are talking.
Date: 02/10/15 06:30 am Title: Chapter Eight
Boom. Called it. Crowd goes wild.
Author's Response: *holds out the spork for you to avenge baby Nick with*
Date: 02/10/15 01:56 am Title: Chapter Seven
Omg!! This is so great! I'm sucked in! I need to know what happened!
Date: 02/09/15 09:33 pm Title: Chapter Seven
Oh wow. I hope Nick tells him what it was that did it. I really want to know what he had wanted to tell Brian that night.
Glad Nick saved Brian from being hit.
UPDATE!!!!!!!!!!!
~Lenni~
Author's Response: But now poor Nicky looks like an eggplant! Aw! Well read on! The next chapter's on it's way soon.
Date: 02/09/15 09:24 pm Title: Chapter Six
Come on Brian, you two need to seriously just sit and talk it all out.
~Lenni~
Date: 02/09/15 09:12 pm Title: Chapter Seven
Well wow I though it would come to blows but between Nick and Brian lol. Now I hope they can talk and clear the air!
Author's Response: I saw your review for the last chapter about the coming to blows and I giggled a little because I knew this was coming... haha
Date: 02/09/15 07:56 am Title: Chapter Six
I love the self-analysis in this chapter. :) The fact that Nick's fear over the fate of Brian's voice is the reason for his acting out makes perfect sense. What I really appreciate is the way you brought this information in. At this moment where we expect Nick to be storming off in a self-centred huff, instead it's the underlying significance for him of Brian's voice ceasing to be something to rely on that drives Nick to act in whatever way he can to deny how severe the problem is. I like how he's fully aware of his actions, and yet the meaning for him is too powerful.
This chapter was also great for moving beyond self-reflection into a taking of: the argument served this purpose for Nick; as did talking to Kevin for Brian.
I also appreciate your attention to detail, from the physical indications when Nick has a nightmare to the characters' inner monologues and interpretations.
The dream scene is like a clue to a problem we don't fully understand. It was such a teaser--we got a slightly longer glimpse without learning very much more at all. ;)
And 'despondent'! That was classic and ironically accurate at the same time.
Please update again soon!
Author's Response: I really appreciate your reviews - the depth you go into in them is really helpful! I've always liked stories whose dimensions are deeper than the actual what's-happening-now. There needs to be roots that reach deep in the characters and something as seemingly insignificant as a sigh can become suspenseful. I feel like Nick is acting the way a child might and I've employed a lot of what I've studied before about child psychological reactions to trauma to his character to try to flesh out the way he's acting and the purpose that drives him to do things like make fun of Brian's therapy or run away. Rebellion. Brian's character is dealing with a weakness he can't control and a friend he just doesn't understand because he doesn't know the depth of the rebellious side that Nick's facing. This first half of the story is really focusing on Nick's issues, the next half will be focusing more on Brian's. We're reaching a turning point here in the story. ....as for "Despondent"... dude, I could so picture Nick saying that in a really grumpy sort of voice! haha And yes, also ironically accurate in the way that Nick's misplaced words often are. ;)
Date: 02/08/15 09:19 pm Title: Chapter Six
I'm surprised they've not come to blows yet lol. Hope they can sort out what ever is going on between them and fast.
Date: 02/08/15 05:40 am Title: Chapter Six
Did big bad Lou touch baby Nick in his special places and he has PTSD? This is when I start carving a plastic spork into a jailyard shiv, right?
Author's Response: 
Date: 02/07/15 11:04 am Title: Chapter Five
What a fascinating chapter. :) I like how almost every significant conflict relates to the past, showing how far Brian and Nick have drifted apart and how they both seem to yearn for the way they used to be. I also think they are both thinking of the same moment that undermined their friendship, and yet believe that the other thinks that moment insignificant. I wonder what it will take for them to communicate, other than antagonistically. But the room sharing does seem to be having the intended effect of preventing each from ignoring the other, and maybe some measure of empathy will return as a result...
Great take on the vocal therapy, btw. I'd love to know if it's accurate or just a best guess. ;) Looking forward to reading more soon!
Author's Response: Mostly the vocal therapy I wrote was based on the brief description given in the movie and a Google search I did on the condition and what exercises people can do to help restore control of the muscles. I'm not sure how accurate it is to the type that Brian has in real life or anything like that though, it's still mostly a best guess, but at least based on somewhat brief research. ...I think you'll be entertained by the How and the Why of the communication to come. ;)
Date: 02/06/15 06:45 pm Title: Chapter Five
I wonder what was so important back in the day, when Brian pushed Nick out and slammed the door. It's gonna drive me bonkers now!
And the hookers thing was funny - I mean, it's Brian for crying aloud!
UPDATE!!!!!!!!!!!!
~Lenni~
Author's Response: I wonder how many hookers would fit in a bathroom?
Date: 02/06/15 03:41 pm Title: Prologue
Before I start reading,does this story have any thing to do with what is happening in the BSB movie? I know some details but I'm European and want to wait until I see the movie before reading any further spoilers hihi.
Author's Response: There's a couple quotes (literally like 3 quotes if that) in the first chapter from the infamous "fight scene", but most of the story takes place after the release of the movie and won't go into details about the actual content of the film.
Date: 02/06/15 08:44 am Title: Chapter Four
This is a great story you're writing! I love the in-depth investigation into Brian and Nick's relationship, particularly at this crucial moment when they're not getting along. You've set it up really well for them to have to sort out their issues.. The characterizations are excellent; and i particularly like how you show each of them, in turns, in an unfavourable light, just as it always seems when you're not getting along with someone you know well and even love. I'm very curious to know where you'll take the plot next, but I hope Brian will soon at least try to tell Nick what he has planned. So intrigued. :D Please update again soon!
Author's Response: I like alternating views in stories because I feel like every story has multiple angles, and every person who experiences it sees everything differently. I felt like this story would be (excuse the pun but...) incomplete without being told from both their viewpoints. I don't think either character is particularly right in the way they're handling their argument, but both can be justified by hearing the situation from their respective angles. I'm glad you're enjoying the story, and I hope you keep reading! I really appreciate the feedback.
Date: 02/06/15 07:28 am Title: Chapter Four
Nick grow up. IT won't kill you to share a room with Brian. I'm sure you used to way back when. If you would calm the hell down and give Brian a chance to speak without jumping all over him things just might go a little better.
And Brian could try and not be so silently annoyed with him.
UPDATE!!!!!!!!!!
~Lenni~
