Date: 02/19/15 12:29 am Title: Part I: Chapter 2
I like how you get right into the family dynamics in this chapter. First, Baylee... then the entire extended family! I think you conveyed nicely how awkward and difficult it was for Meg at first, and also how when she just tried to be herself it carried her through the most difficult moments. I'll be interested to see how the relationship with Baylee develops, and if there's any 'alone' time this visit for Brian and Meg. It's also great to see the parent side of Brian, and how he suddenly has to balance between the two people he cares most about. Keep up the great writing... I'm looking forward to reading more. :)
Date: 02/18/15 08:49 pm Title: Part I: Chapter 2
Six children?!?! I would die! I have one daughter who keeps me super busy. I couldn't even imagine having five more running around. Although, I always pictured Brian as a guy who would want to have a big family. Like, if he was able to have his way, he would have a family that would rival the Duggers ... except all of his kids would have "B" names. LOL I like how you added the bit about Kevin into this chapter; foreshadowing what we already know - that he returns to the group.
