Date: 07/21/15 07:18 am Title: 4. My Doubts
I thought this chapter was short but effective, with just enough dialogue at the right spots to convey the mood and Brian's experiences. The context for his kicking Nick out of bed is a nice touch, although I kind of wished there had been a bit more detail there. The tea episode was great, though! Brian's frustration and turmoil is really palpable, and it makes me wish for a sunnier or hopeful chapter soon, just to balance it out (or keep him sane). The way you've set up the end of this chapter makes me wonder if the story will continue beyond the stay in London through to the projected time when Brian is looking forward to being alone. As much as he seems to long for it, it surely doesn't seem like the healthiest thing when he's already prone to isolating himself...
Great developments and I hope you write more soon!
