Date: 11/30/15 11:17 pm Title: 15. The Bottom
I liked the rawness of this chapter, even though it's kind of in a macabre way. At first I couldn't see the connection to the previous one, since it's clearly a flashback, but this is clearly what came to Brian's mind when Nick thanked him in the previous installment for not giving up. ;) I hope the flashbacks can become linked segments as well, so that we get a more cohesive idea of two or more time frames as the story develops. Great writing, as usual, and I'm looking forward to the next part!
Author's Response: It's not necessarily a flashback, as it was meant to be set after the previous chapter :) But I can see how it can be confusing. It's just that the whole improvement and decrease of his voice seem to be so random if you picture it in an extended amount of time. There are months where he's on top of his game, then the next month it's back where it started, or even worse. At this point in the story, Nick and the others know nothing about the whole quitting thing ;)
Date: 11/30/15 08:24 pm Title: 15. The Bottom
Oh, so it's something that will happen in the future? My confusion was simply because of the time, 'cause last chapter was set during the European leg (and I guess the second one, since Nick is already married) and this is way after. :D
"You're the reason why cavemen drew on the walls..." That's all I'm going to say. lol You can have perfect lead voice but if you sing those songs when you're 35/40, no one is going to take you seriously. So, Nick, back away from next album. XD just sing. XD
Author's Response: Well the timeline isn't that far off. The previous chapter was indeed during the European leg, around May/June, and the current chapter is set in August, I suppose. And yeah, some of Nick's lines are like... what the hell? It feels a bit like filling the rhyme every now and then. (not that Brian does it all that much better, but I digress)
Date: 11/30/15 07:40 pm Title: 15. The Bottom
This chapter is hard, and not only because I can't imagine a world where Brian isn't part of the group. He's the heart of it and I totally believe that this has really been the worst and most terrifying moment.
And not just for Brian.
I seriously wanted to give a hug to Leighanne: one of the hardest thing is watching your loved one sinking so low and knowing that he's the only one who can help himself up; the hardest thing is watching someone you love becoming a ghost (those dead eyes will always haunt and scare me to the core.)
I wonder if you're going to show the Boys's reaction. Plus I'm still confused about that part, in the previous chapter, with Nick demanding to see Brian (I guess he was in hospital?).
And yes, I do hope those songs will ever see the light in the next album. (Please, I'm begging... No more Nick's writing.) i do think that Brian has wrote tons of songs, though I doubt we'll ever see the darkest. Because it's not Brian's style.
Author's Response: Yep, flash forwards are usually meant to be very confusing.^^ But we'll get there eventually. I agree that this must have been a horrible period, and it's probably a good thing that there were no public appearances during that time (though I guess that they would have been cancelled if there were). I do think Nick's songwriting got better over the years, but to me, it's still a little too childish, if that makes sense...
Date: 11/29/15 09:35 pm Title: 15. The Bottom
I'm glad she saved the songs. Just wanted to mention that before I forgot. I'm hoping these songs will come back around later in the story.
I feel for all of the parties involved. So many lives would be affected by Brian's decision to quit. I hope he did not send the "I quit" email. I have a twinge of hope that he did not.
Oh, and teenagers, yikes. What an awkward stage, but we all gotta go through it! The eye rolls. Whenever I rolled my eyes at my mom, she would ask me, is something wrong with your eyes. How about I fix them with my fists, LOL. I can't hear Leighanne saying that to Baylee, but I would find it highly amusing.
Thanks for the update!
