Date: 07/15/13 05:25 am Title: 11
I feel so bad for Kevin, the other agents are just looking out but I think this Tyler guy might be up to something....he doesn't sit right with me. It must be frustrating for Kevin knowing this killer is kind of stalking him and he can't do anything about it.
Author's Response:
Tyler does come across as sketchy doesn't he? It's sad Kevin isn't getting all the help he needs!
Date: 07/15/13 03:56 am Title: 10
Awww Nick thinking Kevin wanted to give him away :( Howie was really cute in this chapter too....and I love that AJ was the one who got the idea for the password and that everyone had the conference about what happened. Nice chapter, this is one of my favorites too :)
Author's Response:
Yes :( poor Nick! And thanks! I love Howie in this one as well. I actually really like them all in this one! even Brian doesn't annoy me! Thanks, Tracy!
Date: 07/14/13 11:21 am Title: 9
Poor Nick.....I know Kevin is trying to.protect him but that was not the right way to go about it. Bet he will be getting some flack for his little experiment. at least Nick knows better not to follow a stranger now.
Author's Response:
aww yes! Not the smartest thing in the world to do but I can SO see Kevin doing that for some reason lol
Date: 07/14/13 11:13 am Title: 8
Aww at Nick having a little girlfriend and them matching clothes, how cute!!! Poor Kevin is so worried about this case, honestly I think it might be messing with his head a bit and he is just paranoid, but something tells me he should keep a closer eye on his brothers.
Author's Response:
Why thank you! Patty is my self insert in this story! LOL And yes poor Kevin, this case does get in his head and makes him overly paranoid!
Date: 07/14/13 11:04 am Title: 1
This chapter had me going Awww all over the place. You really get the family feeling from how everyone talks to one another. Nick is the cutest thing ever, I want to keep him....lol. I loved how Nick wants to keep an eye on his big bro. Lots of cute fuzzy moments :)
Author's Response:
hehe thanks! Yes, there are warm fuzzies all over the place in his story! LOL I picture the My Buddy doll when I think of tiny Nick for some reason but a much cuter less creepy version of it!
Date: 07/14/13 07:03 am Title: 6
See I think that maybe this killer gets the kids to go with him and he has them take their own stuff with them...that could explain why he had no prints and why the kids werent wearing or carrying the items in the first place. i love a good mystery.
I also love the mom in this story, she seems very loving.and human, I like her very much.
Author's Response:
good theories! We'll see if you're right! Thanks, I love Jackie too! I think she's one of my all time favorite original characters I have written, besides Mike. lol
Date: 07/13/13 10:51 am Title: 5
The story has great dialogue and even though there's not much description, this doesn't even really need any. The scenes play out just fine and I feel like I can picture it anyway. I love how you give a back story on the cases, they seem very realistic and intriguing, like I'm watching CSI or any crime show. Awesome job so far.
Author's Response:
Thanks again! There is more description as you go on but I did want this one to have that cop show type feel. Different scenes and interaction with the characters. I love writing dialogue driven stories. I feel like it makes the chapter move faster.
Date: 07/13/13 10:13 am Title: 4
This chapter was so funny I cried, I really like the banter between Kevin and AJ....it's hilarious. I like how you wrote Howie as well, all the boys still seem like themselves so far. Great chapter :)
Author's Response:
Aww, Thanks! You never know in an AU so that's great to hear. The only one that was hard to make seem like himself was Nick for obvious reasons.
Date: 07/13/13 09:46 am Title: 3
Wow. The story about Kevin's dad is so sad. You know, while I've been reading this....it really reminds me of Blue Bloods in a way.....the FBI side and the family side of things. I really like this so far and the back story as well. reading on....
Author's Response:
It is very Blue Bloods. The sequel more so than this one! When Blue Bloods first came out, I was certain they stole my story since I wrote these WAY before Blue Bloods came out! LOL
Date: 07/13/13 02:30 am Title: 2
It was very nice to see the family interaction and Kevin coming home to his brothers, his convo with Nick is simply adorable. I liked that Kevin looks out for them although he doesn't live with them. Really loved the chapter :)
Author's Response:
There are a lot of cute Kevin/Nick moments in this one. That's one really fun thing about writing a teeny tiny Nick! LOL Glad you're enjoying it! Thanks, Tracy!
Date: 07/12/13 04:36 am Title: 1
Well here I am again, this story looked very promising. It's a group story and I love that....plus its an AU. I love that you made all the boys Kevin's brothers, and I had.to laugh at AJ being busted for smoking. Great so far and.looking forward to.reading more :)
Author's Response:
It's funny because I thought you were going to say but...it sucks LOL after it looked very promising. Yup all but Howie (poor Howie lol) Hope you enjoy this one! :O)
Date: 07/03/13 07:19 pm Title: real ending :O)
Hmmm... interesting. Thanks for the "happy ending," at least. haha! I can't say I saw the murder of Jackie Richardson coming. Ariana, though.... there was something about her I didn't quite trust, so I'm a little scared at how inside of your head I've been. I've been wrong, but I've been right. So, on to the sequel, eventually, but for now, laundry calls, lol.
Author's Response:
Like I said earlier, I can't believe you read this entire thing today. These aren't short chapters and this story in itself is a pretty long commitment so thank you so much! I'm glad you didn't see Jackie dying but I had to kill her, it was the only way to set up the dynamic I needed to create in the sequel. I didn't want to kill her because honestly, she was my favorite character. See, you write about your best friends getting it on with the BSB and I kill one of mine (Maria) and make another one a serial killer! lmao poor Ariana aka Mersey. Hope you enjoy the sequel when you start reading it. :o) Loved reading your thoughts!
Date: 07/03/13 07:08 pm Title: 38
I was so confused there for a minute. Of course, since there's a sequel, we know it's not "Over." I'm a sucker for happy endings, though.... I'm not so sure I'm going to get one, but I sure am a sucker for happy endings....
Author's Response:
I think you've mentioned! by the way, I did tell everyone if they wanted their happy ending to stop reading now! So, you were warned! :O) lol
Date: 07/03/13 06:59 pm Title: 37
I'm a sucker for happy endings, Mare......
Author's Response:
Aren't we all? Well okay I'm not... but I know other people are!
Date: 07/03/13 06:52 pm Title: 36
Please tell me that Jackie somehow got the gun away from him? Some sort of top-secret self-defense tactic her husband taught her. lol
Author's Response:
Aww well maybe? I mean doesn't everyone have an inner Charlie's Angel inside of them in times of crisis? lol
