Reviews For Hogwart Letters
Reviewer: ForeverRebel Anonymous 
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Date: 05/25/05 06:55 pm Title: Breathe
[Report This]Date: 05/25/05 06:55 pm Title: Breathe
Its interesting so far. I'm definitely looking forward to reading what happens next. But just a helpful hint... break your story out it'll be a whole lot easier to read. But its great! keep going =)
Reviewer: Starry Eyes Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 05/24/05 06:16 am Title: Breathe
[Report This]Date: 05/24/05 06:16 am Title: Breathe
Not bad of a start, but you need to break up your writing. Having it all in one big paragraph is hard to read and comprehend. Conversations can't bled in with the details. Check out other stories to see what I mean. Nice start, though. Could use some more to read.
