Date: 07/26/03 08:48 am Title: Chapter 07: Falling in Love is Inevitable
Good plot going, but the grammar needs a bit of work to make it easier to read. It'd also help out if you'd put more visual detail into it. But, it's really good. I like where it's going. I think AJ suffers through the most Hell with most fictions. Good work & good luck continuing with it. You've got the start of a good piece of fiction.