Date: 10/26/05 08:02 am Title: chapter 1
the story line is soooo good! you might want to word on the grammar usage, tense shifting and punctuation. revise the words a bit and it will be near-perfect!
Date: 10/13/05 01:32 am Title: chapter 1
that was pretty good!! :)
Date: 10/13/05 12:55 am Title: chapter 1
Good job, your writing skills are good, keep writing