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Reviewer: DelphinaCarter Signed [Report This]
Date: 07/24/13 02:36 pm Title: Chapter 35

Good Kevin. Find your brothers....I think Nick almost feels sorry for Ariana but that is not any reason to harm the family....damn this is frustrating.

Author's Response:

Aww I know! lot's of emotions going on I can imagine, if I was them which thankfully I'm not but I guess since I wrote it I am. Thanks for all the reviews! Wow! You are plowing through this one!

Reviewer: emily_michele Signed [Report This]
Date: 07/13/13 11:58 am Title: Chapter 35

Oh! A drug raid! Makes much more sense now. I don't necessarily like Kevin Sr., but I had a hard time imagining him killing someone "in cold blood." Just to clarify, I thought Ariana said earlier that he killed her parents, not just her mother? And I'm a little confused about if/how this is linked to the baby killer case.

Author's Response:

Actually I think it was me that said he killed both her parents in response to a review and I was wrong lol I think by now we know I have the WORST memory on the planet. I even forgot about the drug raid and most of what is coming up next, actually. That's another reason why I've been reading ahead. Sometimes I wonder if I even wrote this thing at all! FAIL!

You know, one of my biggest regrets looking back on this story and since you brought it up I'll say it now instead of later, is the gaping plot hole with the whole baby killer thing. Well, not really a hole because the information was in my head, but it's one of those things I don't think I actually thoroughly explained in the story. When I was writing this, especially once you hit chapter 37 and beyond, my goal became finishing this more so than explaining and that's where I went wrong. I had lots of my own drama going on in my life towards the end of writing this story (one of my best friends died of cancer and a bad breakup) and you can almost tell a shift in the storytelling because of it. I was so eager to explain why Nick was targeted I kind of lost the fact that all these other kids were also killed in the process. Although, to be fair, I might have explained it in a later Jack scene and just don't recall, so if I didn't then when it's all said and done I'll try to explain any holes I missed! LOL

Reviewer: waj Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 07/07/07 09:27 pm Title: Chapter 35

I actually felt sorry for Ariana...even though I pretty much knew her history, but seeing her explain it...its kinda heartbreaking. But that is no excuse to becoming a monster. And thank god Kevin decided to follow him. This is getting better and better!!

Author's Response: good, i'm glad you felt for her. Thatw as the idea lol

Reviewer: A.W. Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 06/08/07 05:41 am Title: Chapter 35

Love the story, please update when you can!!!!

Author's Response: Thanks and I will

Reviewer: mersey Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 06/04/07 11:38 am Title: Chapter 35

omg the first half of this chapter...omg...ok so i already know the back story for Ariana but still...wow...the way it all played out...i kindafeltsorryforheralittletinybit and also i kindofhateRichardsonSenior....


still, two wrongs dont make a right. She could have come away with it being a counsellor to troubled kids, try to reconcile with her enstranged father and introduce herself to her little brothers who all seem to grow up to be great young men...but no, she let the anger in and turned her vengeful. it's her choice right? and it's the wrong one to make.

and yay for kevin!!! i love him for noticing hte gun! and also, also, the whole riding the bus and wondering if bus drivers carry change! lmao! that's too cute and a little break from the intense chapter. and, and...poor Nick and AJ...the way they found out about everything... :(

Author's Response: Yay! You're the first person to comment on the bus and the hating Kevin senior and feeling bad for Ariana. Thats exactly what I wanted to happen for this chapter. LOL Woot!

Reviewer: Nijntje Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 06/04/07 10:12 am Title: Chapter 35

Here we go.. I got a feeling this is going to be like hell..

Author's Response: aww lol

Reviewer: Anita Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 06/04/07 03:35 am Title: Chapter 35

ooohh you said the thriteenth step! anyway first of all great chapter i am glad to see an update and how wonderful you are doing with it. second as far as i care these stories can go on forever since you are threatening to retire *bursts into tears*

Author's Response: aww *hugs* and it's not a threat, it's a promise lol

Reviewer: Just Marina Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 06/04/07 01:31 am Title: Chapter 35

Great chapter! My favorite part: AJ looking straight to her when she asked him if he knew where the story was going and then thinking that he did know exactly where it was going. And then his reaction, it was just a line describing it but the whole thing made me really sad. And then poor Nick still lost. Kevin has to save them right now. And don't do the 'may' reply here too or you are gonna get another tongue icon lol


Author's Response: well maybe lol ;O)

Reviewer: ALM Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 06/04/07 12:48 am Title: Chapter 35

pls update soon x love it

Author's Response: I shall try

Reviewer: felikia2009 Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 06/03/07 10:50 pm Title: Chapter 35

lmao....dunno if you meant to have it in there, but i laughed at the thirteenth step part :D starting crossovers between your stories are you? :P loved the chapter, will hate to see any ofthe stories end too :( But hey, there will probably be more where these come from, right? :D

Author's Response: yup I did that on purpose, I figured maybe it's the closest thing to a 13th step update you'd all get lmao I thought it would be funny. and I plead the fifth on the rest.