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Reviewer: DelphinaCarter Signed [Report This]
Date: 07/25/13 01:40 am Title: Chapter 42

I asked for a break at work so I could finish reading....this story is probably one of my favorites of yours, next to Mizpah and It Stays....the drama and action are just what I love to read :)

I love Nick sticking up for himself and snapping at her but uh oh they are in trouble!!!

Author's Response:

Wow, that's awesome! LOL Thank so much, you really have no idea how great that makes me feel. :O)

Reviewer: emily_michele Signed [Report This]
Date: 07/16/13 02:09 am Title: Chapter 42

This was a GREAT chapter.  Nice twist with the car wreck, and you've definitely got me wide-eyed over the lighter fluid on Nick's clothing thing.  I had forgotten about that!  But it's on Ariana, too, right?  Is this how she dies???  I kind of feel bad, but it would kind of be a good way for her to go. Anyway, I like that even though this is a very intense chapter, you still managed to throw in some humor. i.e.- "AJ, thank God you’re okay. Why the hell didn’t either of you call me to let me know you weren’t dead?” and “Well if you do talk to the bitch, tell her I am alive and she can suck it!"  I literally laughed at those lines because they seemed a little out of place in such an intense scene, yet were still appropriate. 



Author's Response:

I'm kind of impressed that you want her to die at all. Thanks! I'm really proud of this chapter. I wanted to name it as my favorite action chapter in the other thread but since a few of you are or will be reading this story, I didn't want to give this chapter away lol I needed to add AJ banter in there. His character seemed like the kind to be all "In Your Face!" when he did something no one expected him to so I could see him doing something like that to Ariana if given the chance. You'll have to see if Ariana dies by fire or dies at all!

Reviewer: mersey Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/24/10 10:01 am Title: Chapter 42

ffffffff that was INTENSE!!!! and i LOVE LOVE LOVE how FIERCE Nicky is in this chapter! and also kinda grin my way through all the vulgarities that came out of that kid's mouth. i shouldnt be, cause it's a SERIOUS scene but I cant help the cute! (kids cussing apparently is cute, go me!)

im glad nick is not portrayed as the helpless, scared one.

and you write a really believable crazy dumb person so good! i just dont understand how a person can still say i love you and is aware of who these ppl are and still have the guts to kill them. it's unsettling *shudders*

Author's Response: LMAO nice to now oyu enjoy kids cussing! and lmao @ crazy dumb person. I have a lot of experience with those types of people as you know!

Reviewer: Sam_noelle Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/14/10 12:24 am Title: Chapter 42

Okay, so the only problem with you being ahead of schedule, means that I have to wait longer for the next chapter unless you're ahead of schedule for that one as well. lmao And especially with this actually scary cliffhanger that you left...what the hell girl? lol To be in Nick's situation probably badly injured with the lighter fluid aspect, I'd be pissing myself.

What I really like about this chapter, is that I could actually feel, as I was reading, how tense the whole situation is. I could see the brothers racing down the road, I could see Howie's anger and fear on the phone, etc. It was really good.

Author's Response:

Thanks so much for the compliment, Sam. I am always worrieed how the action sequences come off so i'm glad you were able to feel everything. I know I left it off with a really nasty cliffie lol but that's how this whole series has been so when I was trying to figure out a good cutting off point I had to go with the last scene. I'm hoping i'll get the next chapter up by Friday but it all depends on Lurks. Once I am done with chapter 15 (which I havent' started yet) then i'll move on to this one again. I promise you won't have to wait for too long. Like 3 years lol

Reviewer: winnie Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/13/10 10:41 pm Title: Chapter 42

yeah for a new chapter



Author's Response:

Woot! lol

Reviewer: luna610 Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/13/10 06:23 am Title: Chapter 42

Yoot! First off, yay for you for being ahead of schedule :) That makes me happy. This suspense is killing me! This accident is like a whole other worry. I hope that Nick can get out of there safely. And I hope that Ariana is still alive so she can rot in jail. lol.

And I am totally feeling for Howie. Although I can't even imagine how hard it must be to know that your marriage is all a lie and that your wife is a crazy bitch, I can imagine how torn he must feel. Now he just seems angry. I hope he doesn't leave the force. Loved the description that you were making about the guilty by association thing Brian was thinking. Good stuff!

So glad that you're finishing this. Well, not glad it's ending. Just glad that it'll get an ending. Thank you.

Author's Response:

Thanks Sel! I can only imagine how hard it would be to go through something like Howie is going through. Poor guy. I guess even he deserves some torturing now and then! lol I'm also glad you mentioned the guilt by association thing. I almost named the chapter that but was afriad it would get lost along the way. :O)