Date: 08/12/08 02:34 am Title: Chapter Four: Late-Night Eavesdropper
Hey, you have a typo in one of the first two lines, it says like he said me drive, or something like that, and I really like this passage ".” For a second my blue eyes met his brown. Neither of us broke the gaze. I don’t know why but I just couldn't look away" it's worded really well.
Date: 08/12/08 02:31 am Title: Chapter Three: AJ Knows
Very touching...I like the confession.
I only wonder about the realism of this? is this the way two guys would talk to one another? It's good though, lemme know if you need any suggestions
Date: 08/12/08 02:25 am Title: Chapter One: The Aftermath
I really like the description in this one, I can like, see what's happening, and I like the plot of HIM getting beat up by his girlfriend, not the other way around like usual, very interresting
Date: 08/09/08 04:26 am Title: Chapter Nine: Suspicious Cousins
Brian & Kevin BETTER understand or I'ma kick their butts!
UPDATE!!!
~Lenni~
Author's Response: Lmao! Thank you for the laugh.. anyway they may understand.. they may not..
Date: 08/06/08 07:10 pm Title: Chapter Eight: My Angel (AJ's Point of View)
I love this story
will you update any time soon!!!
Author's Response: I'll try to update very soon. Probably by next week.
i'm glad you like it! =]
Date: 06/24/08 06:03 pm Title: Chapter Eight: My Angel (AJ's Point of View)
AWWWWWWWWWWWW!!!!
Date: 06/22/08 11:19 pm Title: Chapter Eight: My Angel (AJ's Point of View)
Sorry I forgot to review the last chapter. :-) you seem to be coming a long alright, though. keep it up and email me if you need anything!
Date: 06/18/08 02:05 am Title: Chapter Seven: Recovering
You're doing great Linds! Just re-read the whole thing and look for minor and small grammar errors and it'll be perfect. Keep up the good work!
-Casey
Date: 06/13/08 01:58 am Title: Chapter Seven: Recovering
im glad nicks gf is finally gone, but i dont know where the stories going to go now becasue the abusive relationship was a big part of it and nick knows Aj loves him too
Date: 06/13/08 01:54 am Title: Chapter Six: Shouldn't Have Done That
wow the contrast between the 2 relationships is so visible here and i like how you chose to show that this way
Date: 06/13/08 01:51 am Title: Chapter Five: Really Seeing AJ
i like how nick doesnt jump to conslusions and say he loves him right off but he also doesnt say he cant ever love him which is good to let people know and i like how nick finally lets him knows hes awake and aj doesnt try and take back what he says
Date: 06/11/08 04:42 pm Title: Chapter Seven: Recovering
Awww,this is sooo gotta be the sweetest thing ever...update!!!
Date: 06/11/08 03:07 pm Title: Chapter Seven: Recovering
i'm so glad nick is ok
and that b...h better be in jail a long time
update please soon
Date: 06/11/08 02:55 am Title: Chapter Seven: Recovering
aw. Update soon. :)
Date: 06/06/08 09:44 am Title: Chapter Six: Shouldn't Have Done That
What? this can't happend poor nick!!
please please update !!!!
i want to know whats next
btw i love this story because its different from others
