Date: 06/13/08 03:25 am Title: Prologue
It's been a long time since a summary and title has prompted me to read a story! I love the way you have set up the scenes with your description of the setting: it was a starry night, leaving such an "alive" city as Vegas....I love it. Now, was that a little foreshadowing with Brian having a sore neck and then finding the bus driver with a broken neck? And did you hear me yelling at Brian not to leave the bus? Everyone knows you don't leave the bus!
Great job! I'm looking forward to reading more.
Pammy Whammy
Author's Response: YAY! I'm glad you got sucked in even though the summary is simply atrocious lol I didn't even realize the foreshadowing bit about Brian's neck, so that was totally all coincidental--but a totally awesome coincidence, too! I think everyone was yelling at Brian to stay on the bus, but I'm glad you got that involved in the story that you were yelling, too! Thanks for reading!
Date: 06/12/08 08:29 pm Title: Prologue
:OAaah! I love this it sounds scary! poor Brian....you did have me laughing with the neck, though. Update soon!
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad the first chapter started off well; that's always good to hear! LOL I had to inject some lightheartedness into the story so it wouldn't get too too serious. Glad you liked it, stay tuned for more!
Date: 06/12/08 07:01 pm Title: Prologue
oh this sounds really good, Why do i have a feeling its Howie or maybe Kevin? update soon,
Author's Response: Thanks! And I'm not sure why you think it's either of them either lol I'll try to update soon!
Date: 06/12/08 02:26 pm Title: Prologue
aww great start Sarah. I hope Brian is still alive, it'd be great to read astory where all the boys are actually alive. I love how you described Howie's pain at losing his father and AJ's attempts to understand how that felt. Yay for a new suspense.
Author's Response: LOL Don't worry. They're all alive...for the moment lol Muahahahahahah *cough* *cough* lol I'm glad you liked the parts where I dug into their emotional psyches. I think I'd have to say that writing about the Boys' emotions is my forte in any story. Anyway, yes woo-hoo for a new suspense. It's about time, right? lol
Date: 06/12/08 08:40 am Title: Prologue
Interesting! Cannot wait for more!
Author's Response: Thanks! I'll try to update soon!
Date: 06/12/08 08:26 am Title: Prologue
Hot damn, now this is what I'm talking about!! Lol. And poor Lenni, everyone is out to get her man huh?! It's okay Lenni, I'm kinda sad this happened to Brian too!! LOL. Man, I couldn't imagine be in Brian's position, waking up to feel like you're still in a dream, well a nightmare or whatever. Can't wait to see where you're taking this!!
Author's Response: Thanks, Reb! I've been wanting to write this story for a while now and am still working out the plot, but I thought I'd just start writing instead of procrastinating on it. I'm glad you're excited about it, and, yeah, everyone's freaked out about poor Brian lol It's not what all of you think! I promise! I'll try to update soon so everyone can stop flipping out lol
Date: 06/12/08 07:54 am Title: Prologue
*jaw hits floor as I gasp* NOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! NOT BRIAN!!!!!!!!!!!! *goes after the bastard who shot him with a pointy stick*
I swear y'all are out to get me [& my poor, poor, beloved B-rokster!] 'cause of how the Bingo's going - lol.
~Lenni~
Author's Response: lol Lenni! Calm down! I'm not out to get you because of the Bingo stuff, I swear lol Don't worry...you'll see what happens to Brian soon enough. I think you'll be okay then lol
Date: 06/12/08 07:14 am Title: Prologue
oooh interesting! can't wait for more!
Author's Response: Thanks! I can't wait either! lol
Date: 06/12/08 06:54 am Title: Prologue
You know, I like how your incorporated the recent events with Howie into the beginning of the story. I feel so bad for him, and felt you captured Howie's grief quite well.
LOL@Brian too. He would go outside as all horror movies warn against. I enjoyed this, it was enough to bring you in and setting up the story. I'm interested to see where you bring this horror fic. Yay bloody stories!
I love being twisted lol.
Author's Response: Awww, thanks Rose! I love when you're twisted lol I think I've always played up the guys' emotions in every story I do. I dunno, I must like seeing them in pain or something lol Glad you got the horror movie part, too. The whole blonde going outside thing=Brian lol Yay for you liking this!
Date: 06/12/08 06:53 am Title: Prologue
Okay, I'm officially scared...I like the title though; a simple, yet cool idea. Hope you update this one soon!
Author's Response: Thanks, Sam! I think the title may change...as will the summary, but I'm glad you like it so far! I hope it doesn't get too scary myself lol I'm going to work on the next chapter in a bit, so hopefully, an update will come soon!
