Reviewer: MonkeyAbu Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/28/09 02:28 am Title: Chapter 1

I want to say that this is an interesting concept. However, it is very difficult to follow with the lack of proper punctuation, lack of detail, and grammar mistakes. One suggestion I have to make this a little easier to follow is by using quotation marks ("") around the dialogue, for both of them and differentiating who says what, Nick or Janet. Description would also help alot because right now it just seems very random. Just some suggestions and I hope it helps. :)

Author's Response: Thank you for the suggestion and proper grammer instruction. I should try that with the punctuation marks ("") Thanks for reading!