It's an interesting start! I'm guessing this is an AU, since Nick is a teenager who plays basketball? That and the whole Nick/Cameron thing confused me a little. I hope you put in some more explanation later. The schizophrenia diagnosis is interesting, though; you don't see that in too many fanfics, especially not done well.
One thing you'll want to watch is your tenses; the story tends to jump between past and present tense, which interrupts the flow of your writing.
But you have a good start, so I agree with Dee - do some editing and, when you're ready, post it on the main site, absolutechaos. net. No one reads more than snippets of stories on the actual forum.
It's an interesting idea to make him schizophrenic. How much research did you do on the topic? I'd love links because i'm thinking of maybe trying out a story using mental health issues and i'd love to get some links besides the ones I already have.
Great start! Can't wait to see what else you come up with!
AU = Alternate Universe, which, in Bsb fics, is where you take the Backstreet Boys and make them something other than "The Backstreet Boys." So, in your story, Nick is apparantly a 17-year-old basketball player instead of a 29-year-old popstar, Nick Carter of the Backstreet Boys. So it sounds like your story is an AU.
Oh okay, that sounds good. And yeah, it's easy to get so into the writing that you don't catch things like that. It always helps me to come back to my writing the next day to read it again, rather than try to proofread right after I'm done writing; it makes it more fresh, and I can look at it more objectively. Reading out loud helps too - you can usually hear if something doesn't sound quite right when you read it out loud and really listen to yourself.
^ Aww, well that's one thing about our site that might set us apart from the rest. We don't miss much here. We're pretty observant and on top of things.
lol I heart AU's and read them more often than regular ones.
It's an interesting idea to make him schizophrenic. How much research did you do on the topic? I'd love links because i'm thinking of maybe trying out a story using mental health issues and i'd love to get some links besides the ones I already have.
Great start! Can't wait to see what else you come up with!