I know I read this before, somewhere. I think quite possibly on FanFiction.net, but I can't remember. But It's good, and I'm looking forward to reading it again. [Ashley]

A new one from y'all. Awesome! Biggest I gotta say is that y'all definitely have my attention hooked with this one. The humor you used in the chap was absolutely priceless and had me laughing. Keep up the good work! [Ashley]

Author's Response: Sara decided that some humor would be a good idea for this one...chapter 6 is written...just trying to piece it all together...really sad chapter...with its share of humor too...thanks for stickin with us!!

Well holy heck. I was right about Jenn being pregnant. The clues were all there, so no surprise. But this is a definite change for Kevin's character, being addicted to drugs that is. And that attitude he's playin'...keep up the good work! [Ashley]

Haha, Jenn. Nice little Author's Note at the end there. Again, another intense chap. Lots of emotions and the works all intertwined. I think I need a cigarette now after reading that chap and I am going to go have one after I finish this review. Seems like this story keeps getting more intense with each chap. Keep up the good work and update soon because I want to know what's gonna happen next! [Ashley]

Author's Response: I just got off the phone with Sara...and shes gonna try to send me chapter 6...and ill post it as soon as i get it...*hands you lighter* its only gonna get worse...i think...

Damn...very intriguing and intense for a short fic. You guys had a lot of emotions pack in that one. It really was intense and has left me with my jaw dropped open. Keep up the good work with everything! I'm a fan of your writing, you know. [Ashley]

This is definitely a start to quite the different type of fic. But ya know what? I really like it. I enjoy your use of old west dialogue and the way you are able to make it all flow together. Sweet and simple with just enough detail to make the chapter interesting. Didn't think I would be interested in this, but you have my attention hooked. Keep up the good work! [Ashley!]

There are several things I want to point out as suggestions. First of all, developing a background for a story makes it a whole lot more interesting and is really what draws the reader in. If you automatically jump right into a story without developing somewhat of a background to explain to the reader what it's all about, the reader is going to lose interest quite quickly. Second, having dailogue is ok and an essential part to writing a story, but try not to focus just on writing dialogue. Create some depth in your chaps by expanding on details. Don't just speak the story, paint the story for the reader so they get a real sense of everything. Another little thing is try developing your characters a little more. I'm not saying you have to write out a whole biography for each one in the first chap or anything, but a few snippets here and there of what the characters are all about is really helpful and allows the reader to get in touch with each character. Other then that, I sure you could have a decent fic going. Just those few things might do well to be worked on. Keep up the work. [Ashley]

Well, you definitely have my attention hooked on this so far. I have to be honest, after reading the summary I was a bit hesitant aboout checking this out, but the chick's witty sarcasm is great and really puts a fresh splash of humor into this fic. I can see this turning into quite a good fic. I'll be looking for an update. Keep up the good work and update soon! [Ashley]

Author's Response: well im glad u popped on in and read it! :) hope u like as it continues. thank you for the good review!!