Wow, I can't believe that Kevin is living with such a heavy burden. Makes his case so much more personal when he met Jeff. That's a hard thing to accept, knowing the last words you said to someone before they left this Earth was something hateful. I still live with the fact that the last time I saw my Grandfather before he passed was in the hospital. Only, he died at home a few weeks later but I was too damn busy to see him. Never got to tell him goodbye... But, anyway, it's a very emotional chapter and the flashback was well done. Fit perfectly within the story line. But, I do have some suggestions, just from being in Enriched English classes and constantly getting hammered on grammaticals. I noticed one portion of the paragraph had two people speaking in it. You should separate one person speaking from another, makes it too confusing after awhile. And I noticed one other thing like with this sentence: ?That was uncalled for Kevin.? She said sternly, probably the most stern she had ever been with him his whole life. When someone speaks and you have the description afterwards, technically, it's still a whole sentence. So, it should look like this: ?That was uncalled for Kevin, (comma instead of period)? she (uncapitalized to carry on the sentence) said sternly, probably the most stern she had ever been with him his whole life. I know that no one is perfect with grammar, that's why even top novelists have an editor. But, I thought it'd be good information to include, just in case. Don't be mad with me. I just thought you'd like to know.

Author's Response: aww I had something very similar happen with my grandfather as well. It's hard when you don't get to really say goodbye and something like that happens. You fell so unresolved. I know the comma and period thing I just miss them sometimes and usually the quotes I do correctly as well. Sometimes it just shows up like that when I copy from word and I am to lazy to fix it lol. I am in the process of getting a book edited so I know what you mean. It may sound horrible to say this but for fanfic I don't worry so much about it. lol

excellent job i really enjoyed this chapter you rock my world

Author's Response: thanks Anita lol

I loced the chapter, the relationship between the brothers fits perfectly. I'm the youngest in my fan with a bro 18 years older lol....so I can relate to them perfectly. The big bro coming over for a visit and looking out for everyone...you did a great job. Update soon! You must! hehe

Author's Response: aww thanks. When I write them as brothers I like to make big age gaps not like there aren't any naturally but I think it kind of adds to the story. Thanks so much for the feedback :)

NOW I WANT CHAPTER THREE NOW GIVE IT TO ME RIGHT NOW! (was that demanding enough?). of course this was yet another excellent chapter by you and im in love with this story already. and yes kevin is mine and nick wil be soon

Author's Response: it's coming soon :D and you can't have them both! lol

Good to see that people is enjoying this story. Stay tune people because it will get even better. You are doing an AMAZING job with this story Mare and I'm not saying anything more because....well because you already know how much I love it... although I think I prefer the one you posted in your site, you know PS :) LOL Haha just kidding!

Author's Response: Aww you are such a great PR person Maria! lol Thanks for always being so supportive! ;)

except kevins married to me....... day dream all you want mare cuz kevin and i are happily married but i wont deny the greatness of this story

Author's Response: LOL okay you can have Kevin I give up. I still have Nick though hehehe

Very strong beginning!!!! i like it please update when you can!!!!

Author's Response: Thanks! :)