Hello, Summer...I'm Kristal (or Kris, whichever). I picked this story up almost a week ago, because I'm a major fan of AJ romances..although I don't usually write them myself, lol. So anyways, I'm sorry that I haven't reviewed yet, but hopefully I can make up, for that.

First of all, the storyline, where the girl need to be taught to love again, is pretty common. It's definitely a challenge to make that plot your own, and set it apart from all the others. My personal opinion, is that you have done pretty well, at this. I get bored reading the same thing over, and over...those stories that are all the same, just different names and slightly different events. However, this has done very well at keeping my attention. I really liked how they met and how its been a slow process, rather than them meeting and practically getting married the next day, lol.

Your descriptions, and the amounts in which you use them, is very well balanced. For example, in this chapter, you gave awesome descriptions, of their kiss and how it effected her...yet you didn't go overboard in your descriptions, of how they ate their breakfast. I like that. A lot of stories give too much unneeded description, or not nearly enough description, when it's needed. I feel that you have found the right balance here.

Dialog can be very tricky, sometimes, getting it to flow well and everything. So far, all your dialog flows naturally. There isn't an excess of it, and is comes across very realistically. I haven't really found any un-needed dialog, that didn't add or progress the story. All the conversations have been vital to the storyline, and have helped to progress the story along, rather than hindering it.

On to structure...again, I think you've done quite well. The paragraphs are spaced nicely. You have the paragraphs split, like they should be, in the right spots. You don't have super long paragraphs with multiple people speaking, or anything. I haven't found too many run-on sentences or any fragments. Although I've spotted some places where comma usage was off (very minor detail), a little, I think you have a very good handle on your spelling and grammar.

Are you sick of me yet?!? HAHA. Last paragraph, I swear! I love your characters. They have great depth, to them! I don't feel bored, with them, or like they are flat, shallow characters. They have good definition, real emotion, and are very realistic. I like Morgan...I haven't had a husband die, but the one man I was truly in love with (still am, actually) was killed 3 1/2 years ago...this makes me picky, when it comes to characters having realistic emotions, in this area...Morgan's emotions remind me, of my own. The hurt and pain...not wanting to live because you feel like you're already dead...those are very real emotions and Morgan portrays them well. Reading her thoughts and emotions bring my own, to the surface, and I am able to have that connection, with her. I can relate, to her, and it makes me love her. Oh...and I just LOVE Alex, in this! So...in closing, I very much enjoy this story and please UPDATE SOON! (I'm done rambling now! :-P)

Author's Response:

Hi, Kristal! LOL, jimminie crickets this was long, but I really appreciate it. I'm trying so hard not to do a usual storyline, or love story. I like to keep things different and not follow the over used plotlines lol. And I hate when I read a fic and the characters are falling in love in like two days...seriously? How often does that really happen? Relationships take time and don't go from 'hi, nice to meet you' to 'omg, I love you' overnight lol. I'm glad you feel that same way.

I definitely try to keep things as realisitic as possible and I'm not big on over describing things. Sometimes the dialogue speaks for itself and you don't need tons and tons of different descriptions. I try to draw my readers in and paint a picture that allows them to imagine it, similar to watching a movie I suppose you could say. I just type out what I see for it myself.

Thanks so much for this comment! I'm so glad you love my characters and what I'm bringing to this tale. I'm trying to keep things interesting and I don't want anyone bored reading this lol. I'm so sorry for what you went through losing the one man you were truly in love with and I'm glad you're able to connect to Morgan and I'm glad that I'm creating her, and writing her in the appropriate ways. And, of course, I'm so glad you like Alex too lol.

Once more, thanks again and I hope you'll continue to keep reading!

This is amazing!!!  I hope she can let go enought to give them a chance. The are so perfect for each other.. more soon please!!

Aww soo cute! I am glad she finally sorta opened up to him about her husband. Great update, I can't wait for more. Although, I think she should have taken him up on the Grand Canyon offer! haha

Author's Response: Yeah, she's slowly coming around.. he just needs to keep working his charm lol. As for the Grand Canyon offer, I woulda taken him up on that. Heck, I woulda taken him up on the Louvre in Paris as well. LOL...thanks so much for taking a minute to give feedback, it really helps. :)

YES finally that is ALL I have to say to that LOL.

Author's Response: LOL, I knew you'd like it. Hehe.

Wow! This so good!!! Your writing is so beautiful and detailed. I love it... update soon!

Author's Response: Aww you make me blush hehe. Thank you so much for your inspiring words, they really help. :)

Great chapter! Very cute date. I wish I had a real one of those! haha I can't wait for more, keep up the great work!

Author's Response: LOL yeah, man that'd be a pretty nice date. Thanks so much for the comment!

So great i can't wait to read more!!! :)

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'll have more for you to read soon! :)